> > I don't think that there is a substantive issue here, just an > editorial one. What about just reusing Jorge's text, like this: > > >Margaret said (quoting the draft): > > > >>> The IAD is responsible for ensuring that all contracts give the IASA > >>> and the IETF all rights in data needed to satisfy the principle of > >>> data access. > Margaret suggested this changed text:
> The IAD is responsible for ensuring that all contracts give IASA and > the IETF the perpetual rigth to use, display, distribute, reproduce, > modify and create derivatives of all data created in support of IETF > activities. > The above text change seems fine to me and states the same as what we want to say (in my view) and is less "twisted" (I agree). So I have made the (in my view editorial) change in my edit buffer. Bert > It is not much longer than the original, and I don't have to twist my > brain around to realize what it is trying to say. > > >I can't think of a way to untwist the sentence more while making it > >say the same thing - suggest that we don't make any change. > > Does my suggestions above help? > > Margaret _______________________________________________ Ietf mailing list Ietf@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ietf
