- Abstract: "It replaces..." Here "it" seems to refer to "IKE", which isn't correct; it should refer to "This document". This could be fixed by e.g. switching the first and second sentence, or changing "it" to "This document".
- Section 1.2: s/IKE_INFORMATIONAL/INFORMATIONAL/ - Section 1.4, 3rd paragraph: suggest changing "message with no payloads" and "also contain no payloads" to "empty message" (Section 1.2 says empty message means encrypted payload only, but "no payloads" sounds a bit different) - Section 2.21.2: There's a "NOTE FOR WG DISCUSSION" (just FYI so it's not forgotten there) - Section 2.23: "port on which this packet was sent": would "port from which this packet was sent" be clearer? - Section 2.23, 5th bullet ("The recipient of either..."): the "that system SHOULD start sending keepalive packets as defined in [UDPENCAPS]" is a bit redundant; it's repeated two bullets later. - Section 2.25.1, first paragraph: "..based on the nonces": suggest adding pointer "(see Section 2.8.1)". - Section 2.25.1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: suggest adding pointer "(see Section 1.4.1)" - Section 2.25.2, "...based on the nonces": suggest adding pointer "(see Section 2.8.2)". Best regards, Pasi _______________________________________________ IPsec mailing list IPsec@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ipsec