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draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-pqc-auth-11: No Objection

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# IESG review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-pqc-auth-11

CC @MikeBishop

## Comments

### Section 3.2.1, paragraph 5
```
     [RFC9329]) or the underlying network is known to support sufficiently
     large MTUs without fragmentation issues, since PQC public keys and
```
How would one know this? Is PMTUD needed here?

### Section 5, paragraph 17

"ensures" is a strong word for the unknown future.

### Section 8, paragraph 1
```
     Section 10.1.1 of PQC for Engineers [RFC9958]).  For example, ML-DSA
     provides SUF-CMA security.  However, some algorithms, such as SLH-
     DSA, achieve existential unforgeability under chosen-message attacks
     (EUF-CMA; see Section 10.1.1 of PQC for Engineers [RFC9958]).  This
```
According to RFC9958, `ML-DSA, FN-DSA, and SLH-DSA provide EUF-CMA security.`
This text suggests that's a distinction between the two, but the citation
suggests they should be equivalent.

### Section 8, paragraph 3
```
     The Security Considerations section of PKIX Algorithm Identifiers for
     ML-DSA [RFC9881] and PKIX Algorithm Identifiers for SLH-DSA [RFC9909]
     apply to this specification as well.
```
Why are these not normative references?

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Grammar/style

#### "References"
```
orithms>. [Lyu09] "V. Lyubashevsky, “Fiat-Shamir With Aborts: Applications to
                                    ^
Lattice and Factoring-Based Signatures“, ASIACRYPT 2009", <https://www.iacr.o
                                      ^
```
Be careful with so-called "smart quotes". Check orientation, etc. or just use
regular '"' for both.



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