Hi Ron, Thanks for your comments, please see my reply below:
On Wed, Aug 6, 2014 at 7:58 PM, Ronald Bonica <rbon...@juniper.net> wrote: > Folks, > > The following are a few comments regarding draft-ietf-lisp-introduction-04. > Expect further comments in the next few days. > > - Section 1 adds no value. I agree with the editor's suggestion to remove. > > - Section 2 is empty. So clearly, I agree with the editor's suggestion to > remove. > > - Section 3 contains a few broken definitions. But sooner or later, you will > need a Glossary. So, I disagree with the editor's suggestion to remove the > entire section. Please change the name of this section from "Initial > Glossary" to "Glossary" or "Terminology". Then delete its contents. Then > import whatever definitions you need, verbatim, from RFCs 6830-6836. This > should cover most of the terminology that you need. It will also prevent you > from redefining words. If you find that you still need to define a few terms, > please do so. > Agreed, we should use the terminology as defined in RFCs 68030-6836. This will actually make the rest of the RFCs easier to read, one of the goals of LISP-INTRO. > - Section 4 adds no value. I agree with the editor's suggestion to remove. > > - Section 5 adds no value. I agree with the editor's suggestion to remove. > > - Section 7.3 needs to be rethought. LISP doesn't provide TE, in the same > sense that MPLS does. It's quite different. > RFC6830 states that LISP offers TE. Albert > - Section 7.4 adds no value. I agree with the editor's suggestion to remove. > > - Section 7.5 is not in charter. I agree with the editor's suggestion to > remove. > > - Section 7.7 is not in charter. I agree with the editor's suggestion to > remove. > > - Section 7.8 adds no value. I agree with the editor's suggestion to remove. > > - Appendix A is redundant with Section 3. I agree with the editor's > suggestion to remove > > - Appendix B contains interesting information, but does not contribute to the > goals of the draft. I agree with the editor's suggestion to remove it. > > - Please add a short "Introduction" before the Glossary. It should read as > follows: > > "The Internet is experiencing problems A, B and C. LISP solves this problem > by doing D, E and F. LISP will solve A, B and C because [....] > > D, E, and F distinguish LISP from existing routing protocols. The > architectural tradeoffs associated with D, E and F are [....]. > > > Standby for more comments. > > > > Ron Bonica > > _______________________________________________ > lisp mailing list > lisp@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/lisp _______________________________________________ lisp mailing list lisp@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/lisp
