Ketan Talaulikar has entered the following ballot position for
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Sharing a few comments for consideration in the form of snippets from idnits 
output for v25:

376          contact
377            "WG Web:   <https://datatracker.ietf.org/wg/lsr/>
378             WG List:  <mailto:[email protected]>
379             Author:    Stephane Litkowski
380                        <mailto:[email protected]>
381             Author:    Yingzhen Qu
382                        <mailto:[email protected]>
383             Author:    Acee Lindem
384                        <mailto:[email protected]>

<minor> There seems to be a discrepancy between this text and the author list
;-)

385             Author:    Pushpasis Sarkar
386                        <mailto:[email protected]>
387             Author:    Ing-Wher Chen
388                        <mailto:[email protected]>
389             Author:    Jeff Tantsura
390                        <mailto:[email protected]>
391            ";
392          description
393            "The YANG module defines the generic configuration and
394             operational state for Segment Routing ISIS extensions for the
395             MPLS data plane, which is common across all of the vendor
396             implementations.

<major> "is common across all of the vendor implementations" ... can this
assertion be really made? Suggest to remove this part.

398             This YANG model conforms to the Network Management
399             Datastore Architecture (NMDA) as described in RFC 8342.


533          identity s-flag {
534            base adj-sid-flag;
535            description
536              "Group flag.";

<major> This is called a "set" in ISIS RFC8667

537          }

539          identity pe-flag {

<minor> Why not "p-flag"?

540            base adj-sid-flag;
541            description
542              "Persistent flag.";
543          }


564          identity sf-flag {

<minor> why not s-flag?

565            base sid-binding-flag;
566            description
567              "S flag. If set, the binding label TLV should be flooded
568               across the entire routing domain.";
569          }


602          grouping sid-sub-tlv {
603            description
604              "SID/Label sub-TLV grouping.";
605            container sid-sub-tlv {
606              description
607                "Used to advertise the SID/Label associated with a
608                 prefix or adjacency.";
609              leaf length {
610                type uint8;
611                description
612                  "Length of the SID value. YANG model specification
613                   is necessary since it dictates the semantics of the
614                   SID.";
615              }
616              leaf sid {
617                type uint32;
618                description
619                  "Segment Identifier (SID) - A 20 bit label or 32 bit SID.
620                   If the length is set to 3, then the 20 rightmost bits
621                   represent an MPLS label. If the length is set to 4, then
622                   the value is a 32-bit index.";
623              }

<major> Is this going to be extended similar to what was done for OSPF for
consistency?

624            }
625          }


1289    6.  Acknowledgements

1291       Authors would like to thank Derek Yeung, Acee Lindem, Yi Yang for
1292       their major contributions to the draft.  Also thank Reshad Rahman,
1293       and Tom Petch for their thorough reviews and helpful comments.

1295       MITRE has approved this document for Public Release, Distribution
1296       Unlimited, with Public Release Case Number 19-3033.

<major> With the text above (which applies MITRE has some sort of an approval
authority over this document), it seems more appropriate for this author to drop
their MITRE Corporation affiliation.



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