ah that's great Peter we just need these small changes then: * add this phrase to the start of the "Sugar automatically saves" paragraph: Sugar sets aside the traditional “office-desktop” metaphor, presenting a child-friendly simple graphical environment.
* replace "Sugar automatically saves your progress" with "Sugar automatically saves the child's progress" * add at the end of that graf "Applications in Sugar are known as Activities, some of which are described below." * Inverse the second and third grafs - describe Sugar first, then the specific advantages of the Soas spin. many thanks Sean On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 5:33 PM, Peter Robinson <pbrobin...@gmail.com> wrote: > See the post I just sent to the list less than a hour ago :-) > > Thanks Sean, > > Peter > > On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 4:24 PM, Sean DALY <sdaly...@gmail.com> wrote: > > Hi Tom, Gonzalo had mentioned this, I have a rewrite of the introduction > in > > the works and Sam's Activity texts are good. The main issue is explaining > > that SOAS Desktop is not a desktop (!) > > > > Peter is coordinating on the Fedora side. > > Sean > > > > > > On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 3:37 PM, Thomas Gilliard <satelli...@gmail.com> > > wrote: > >> > >> Please Help > >> f22 get fedora spins page is being written and needs suggestions > >> > >> robyduck on #fedora-qa needs sugar writeup of spins page on fedora for > >> f22: > >> he has thi text: > >> http://lists.sugarlabs.org/archive/iaep/2015-May/017396.html > >> > >> I sent him 2 screenshots yesterday > >> http://wiki.sugarlabs.org/go/File:Sugar-Home_.png > >> http://wiki.sugarlabs.org/go/File:Screenshot_of_Mesh_1.png > >> > >> http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/ is the proposed format > >> he needs it done by saturday .... > >> > >> satellit > >> > >> _______________________________________________ > >> Sugar-devel mailing list > >> sugar-de...@lists.sugarlabs.org > >> http://lists.sugarlabs.org/listinfo/sugar-devel > > > > >
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