Thanks Jonathan,

See in line.

I have no substantive comments, but have noticed, among other things, a few somewhat inconsequential typos that could nevertheless impact readability, particularly for those for whom English is a second language:
• Page 3, penultimate bullet: s/by network operator/by a network operator
• Why is figure 1 on page 5 when it is first referenced at the top of page 4? • Section 2.1, second paragraph (2 typos): s/peole or extarnal/people or external • Section 2.1, last paragraph: I don't understand the second sentence that starts: “Although it provides information …” • Section 2.2, second paragraph: i don't understand the first sentence that starts: “Although the [RFC7950], [RFC7950] …”
I guess this should be:

   Although YANG [RFC7950 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc7950>] doesn't 
explain the relationship of
   the terms '(YANG) data model' and '(YANG) module', the authors
   understand there is a 1:1 relationship between a data model and a
   YANG module, but a data model may also be expressed using a
   collection of YANG modules (and submodules).  The module provides a
   coherent data model representation of the software environment
   consisting of the operating system and applications running on the
   device.  The decomposition, ordering, and execution of changes to the
   operating system and application configuration is the task of the
   agent that implements the module.

Re-reading this paragraph, its logical place is in the terminology section 1.1, next to data model and module definitions.

Regards, Benoit
• Section 3.3, second paragraph: s/include ability/include the ability
• Section 6: small point but I believe the second acknowledgement should be me(!), “Jonathan Hansford”, not “David”

Jonathan

=O)


On 1 May 2017, 03:32 +0100, The IESG <iesg-secret...@ietf.org>, wrote:

The IESG has received a request from the NETCONF Data Modeling Language
WG (netmod) to consider the following document:
- 'YANG Module Classification'
<draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification-06.txt> as Informational
RFC

The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits
final comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the
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Abstract


The YANG data modeling language is currently being considered for a
wide variety of applications throughout the networking industry at
large. Many standards-defining organizations (SDOs), open source
software projects, vendors and users are using YANG to develop and
publish YANG modules for a wide variety of applications. At the same
time, there is currently no well-known terminology to categorize
various types of YANG modules.

A consistent terminology would help with the categorization of YANG
modules, assist in the analysis of the YANG data modeling efforts in
the IETF and other organizations, and bring clarity to the YANG-
related discussions between the different groups.

This document describes a set of concepts and associated terms to
support consistent classification of YANG modules.




The file can be obtained via
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification/

IESG discussion can be tracked via
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification/ballot/


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