Document: draft-ietf-netmod-sub-intf-vlan-model Title: Sub-interface VLAN YANG Data Models Reviewer: Sue Review result: Ready with Issues
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-netmod-sub-intf-vlan-model-?? Reviewer: Sue Review Date: 2025-10-14 IETF LC End Date: 2025-10-23 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: Major issues: none Minor issues: Security section paragraph 3, the last sentence makes one wonder if there are missing sensitivities/vulnerabilities. If there are, please fill this in so the operators have a warning. If this is an editorial NIT, please just respond with completed text. Nits/editorial comments: 1. Abstract - use of the ";" in the third sentence is confusing. Consider rewriting to remove ";". The sentences do not follow grammatical rules for ";" as parallel sentences. 2. use if "i.e." in sections 4, paragraph 3, sentence 3, should be considered for rewriting. The sentence becomes very confusing. 3. page 14, Yang text, case dotq-priority-tagged, leaft tag-type, description needs to end with "." according to yang rules. 4. page 17, container dot1q-tag-rewrite, description, "E.g." would be better replaced by "For example," 5. page 18, container rewrite, case symetrical, container symmetrical, description, "E.g." would be better replaced by "For example," 6. page 25, Security Considerations section, paragraph 3, last sentence does not list "subtress and data nodes with sensitivities". Last sentence is unclear and uses incorrect English format. _______________________________________________ netmod mailing list -- [email protected] To unsubscribe send an email to [email protected]
