Hi, Barry, Thanks so much for your feedback! Please find my comment in-line...
On 08/14/2015 07:14 PM, Barry Leiba wrote: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > Nice document you have here. Just two really small comments, neither of > which needs any response, and both of which you can ignore if you > prefer. > > An observation: Three times, you say that something is "obvious", and > this can come across as condescending -- and can be frustrating to a > reader for whom it isn't obvious. I suggest omitting that, so > > - In Section 3.1.1.1, change "Firstly, as it should be obvious from the > algorithm described above" to "Firstly, as shown by the algorithm > described above". > > - In Section 3.1.3.2, change "For obvious reasons, the search space for > addresses following" to "The search space for addresses following". > > - In Section 3.3, change "Obviously, a number of other network > reconnaissance vectors" to "A number of other network reconnaissance > vectors". Will update. Thanks! > -- Section 3.1.1.1 -- > > An observation, for which the response is probably "everyone knows this, > so no change is needed," but please think about it for a fleeting > moment: > > 1. The "Universal" bit (bit 6, from left to right) of the address is > set to 1 > > Bit 6, starting from 0, or from 1? The answer (which I can see from the > example) is "starting from 0." Yes, we assume this to be known. > Firstly, as it should be obvious from the algorithm described above, > two bytes (bytes 4-5) of the resulting address always have a fixed > value (0xff, 0xfe) > > Bytes 4-5, starting from 0 or from 1? The answer (which I can see from > the example) is "starting from 1." Good grief! mm.. how about changing this to "bytes 3-4" -- and also adding a note regarding how the bytes are numbered? Thanks! Best regards, -- Fernando Gont SI6 Networks e-mail: fg...@si6networks.com PGP Fingerprint: 6666 31C6 D484 63B2 8FB1 E3C4 AE25 0D55 1D4E 7492 _______________________________________________ OPSEC mailing list OPSEC@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/opsec
