Thank you Sriram for the updated document.
Just a minor nit: in the terminology section, P2C and C2P are in uppercase but
p2p is in lower case. This can be fixed later at the AUTH48 stage
-éric
On 31/08/2019, 06:46, "Sriram, Kotikalapudi (Fed)"
<kotikalapudi.sri...@nist.gov> wrote:
Eric,
Thank you for your comments. Sorry about the delay in replying.
We have uploaded a new version and have included changes
reflecting your comments. Please see:
https://tools.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-opsec-urpf-improvements-04.txt
Please also see responses to your comments inline below.
-- Abstract --
>The abstract reads like 'promises' but not as a summary of the document. Is
>there any chance to add 2 lines summarizing the 'how' ?
>
Added some more wording in the abstract to address your comment.
We have summarized the 'how' in the intro with a whole paragraph.
Probably better not to make the abstract overly long.
>-- Section 1.1 --
>I am sure that by now you know that you have to use RFC 8174 boilerplate
;-)
>
Yes. Done.
>-- Section 2.2 --
>For completeness and symmetry with section 2.3, please explain which
packets
>will be dropped.
>
Good catch. Done.
>-- Section 2.3 --
>Suggestion: define "RPF list" before first use (even if mostly obvious).
>
>Please define "lateral peer" and why it is different to any other "peer".
>
Added Section 1.1. "Terminology" per your suggestion.
We've provided definitions of these terms and more there.
>-- Section 3.1 --
>Please define the "cone" used in this section. First time that I ever read
this
>term and the RIPE paper does not explain it either (of course I am not a
>routing expert).
>
Definition of customer cone is also included in the Terminology section 1.1.
>== NITS ==
>
>-- Section 1 --
>Beside the intro, this section also introduces some terminology wording.
May I
>suggest to have a (sub)section about "terminology" ?
>
Good suggestion. Done.
>-- Section 2.1 --
>CMTS was introduced as an acronym but not DSLAM.
>
>
Mention of DSLAM was not essential. So it is removed in the updated version.
Mention of CMTS, PDN-GW is sufficient in that context
and they are introduced.
Sriram
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