Here are some comments to the draft:
You may want to define the ruleset, listing service, listing server in the
terminology section.
Section 3.1, bullet 2 says that "The Database may use the rule-set list to
determine its response", which I think is not right. The Database uses the
location of the master device to determine its response, and the required
parameters and ruleset to be supported are sent back to the master device based
on the device's location.
Section 4 starts with listing the components of paws. Spectrum use notify is
missing from that list.
Section 4.1 has this sentence: " A Device SHOULD support operation in any
regulatory environment." It must be some leftover which I think should be
deleted.
Section 4.1, configuration update:
s/SHOULD be able to update/SHOULD update, 2 instances
when the URI changes, the inclusion of the DbUpdateSpec should be a MUST
instead of SHOULD. Same comment for the next sentence (s/SHOULD/MUST)
Section 5.1
Both point and region are listed as optional for the Geolocation element. But
one of them has to be present.
The Note below the figure says " Note: point and polygon are mutually
exclusive", while it should say " Note: point and region are mutually exclusive"
In several places you have 'depends'; expand what does it depend on.
" If present, it indicates that the GeoLocation represents a
region. Database support for regions is OPTIONAL."
I would delete the second sentence, and instead state in 4.4.3 that the support
for this request is optional.
" center: The center refers to the location of a GeoLocation point and
is represented as the center of an ellipse. REQUIRED."
What does the REQUIRED word mean here? That the parameter center must always be
present? That doesn't seem to be right as the ellipse shape may not be present
(instead the polygon may be present).
Throughout section 6, where you define the schemas, the description field is
broken up into multiple lines and you have quotation marks and + signs in all
lines. It would improve the readability of the document if you removed those
quotation marks and + signs.
- Gabor
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Gabor (Nokia-CIC/SiliconValley)
Sent: Wednesday, June 19, 2013 10:18 AM
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Subject: [paws] WGLC on http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-paws-protocol-06
All,
The Editor of the document posted a new version and indicated that all open
issues raised on the list were resolved, and that there are no more open issues
he is aware of.
Therefore, I'd like to issue a wg last call on the document. We need reviews
and feedback in order to be able to progress the document.
Please read through the draft and send any comments you may have to the list in
the next 2-3 weeks.
If you review the draft and have no comments, send a note to the list that the
draft is good as it is, we need these notes as much as we need the actual
comments.
Thanks, Gabor
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