Thanks for the review.  I'll make the text changes.
I think we'll want to keep the pdl> prompt text in
the interactive examples so it is clear what is user
input and what is output.  It should be consistent
though.  Also, for consistency:

- verbatim example paragraphs should be indented
  the same throughout the book (say 2 spaces)

- put the ; at the end of example code lines (they may
  not be required interactively, but it will keep folks
  from being surprised if they cut and paste to start a
  program file...

Thanks,
Chris

On 1/22/2012 12:44 PM, Mike Burns wrote:

Just went through PDL::Book::FirstSteps and found some stuff that are
candidates to be fixed:

* In "Alright let's do something" section, second paragraph 'editting'
should be 'editing'
* In the stand-alone script example for spiral graph there should be a
'use PDL::Graphics::PGPLOT;' after 'use PDL;'
* In "Measuring the brightness of M51" - first two pdl shell examples
start 'pdl>', maybe take those out for consistency?

* In "Twinkle, twinkle, little star":
** description of '$section = $gal(337:357,178:198);' says range is 327
to 367 and 168 and 208. Is that correct? Maybe I'm not understanding
NiceSlice very well ...
** in example to get the FWHM is has 'print $peak, $fwhm, $background;'
- it should probably be 'p $peak ...' since print doesn't put spaces
between the numbers
** In the fake star script I had to add 'use PDL::NiceSlice;' otherwise
I got an error that would likely confuse new PDL users

* The description of the figures don't start numbering them until 1.6.
Maybe number them all?
* May also want to mention about the aspect ratio before displaying
images. For me, using a fresh install, the images were stretched wider
than the examples shown. Might cause confusion for some beginners.

Other than those, everything worked as expected. I tried everything in
pdl2 and had no issues. I'll continue proofreading.

Mike

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