Hi Steve, I agree with Slao about the instrumentation being a little too thick to fully appreciate what is happening. Also, the snare sounds a little buried and overly snappy. Maybe adding a little bit more bass boost may warm it up.
I really enjoyed your lyrics. This is a great storytelling type. Thank you for sharing! I look forward to hearing your other songs. Kindly, Vaughn On 12/8/15, Steve Sparrow <i...@sparrowsound.com.au> wrote: > Hey man, I appreciate you taking the time to listen, and value your input. I > am releasing an album shortly, and this is the opening track, it will be on > iTunes in the next few weeks, So this is why i thought i’d throw something > out there, and get some thoughts before finalising. > Thanks again Slau > Steve > >> On 9 Dec 2015, at 1:16 am, Slau Halatyn <slauhala...@gmail.com> wrote: >> >> Hi Steve, >> >> Apart from the minor mix comments, the issue of orchestration is a big >> picture item and, of course, a matter of style and taste, thus the "grain >> of salt" reference. Of course, it's not a matter of good or bad but just >> different. Sounds good. >> Cheers, >> Slau >> >> On Dec 7, 2015, at 11:52 PM, Steve Sparrow <i...@sparrowsound.com.au >> <mailto:i...@sparrowsound.com.au>> wrote: >> >>> Hey Slau, thanks for the feedback. i’ll go through this, and see if i >>> might fine tune it. Think a agree with you on a lot of this. >>> Thanks for your thoughts. >>> Steve >>> >>>> On 8 Dec 2015, at 2:43 pm, Slau Halatyn <slauhala...@gmail.com >>>> <mailto:slauhala...@gmail.com>> wrote: >>>> >>>> Hi Steve, >>>> >>>> Nice job. Sounds pretty balanced and all. OK, here's my comments, since >>>> you asked for feedback and take it with a grain of salt. >>>> >>>> To me, it sounds like you've got a whole lot going on in terms of >>>> instrumentation. There are several guitars popping out here and there >>>> but there isn't a clear riffing instrument. In other words, every >>>> instrument is riffing either here or there and, at least to me, the >>>> effect is that each riff just gets buried among all the others. Picture, >>>> something like a Dire Straits tune. There's essentially one guitar >>>> that's doing the riffs while the other handles rhythm. To me, that's >>>> more memorable and more of a highlight. I guess it's the idea of keeping >>>> the dish simpler, with less ingredients while this tune has a whole lot >>>> of ingredients and, while it may taste good, it's hard to pick out the >>>> key ingredients because there are so many things competing for one's >>>> attention. Naturally, that's more of an orchestration comment rather >>>> than anything to do with mixing, per se, but that's the first thing that >>>> stands out to me. >>>> >>>> As far as mix specifically, I wasn't crazy about the snare sound. It >>>> seems to be buried a bit yet still harsh. The upper mid range seems to >>>> be a bit pronounced. >>>> >>>> Finally, before your second chorus, I believe you have the sound of >>>> clearing your throat that somehow got in there somewhere, perhaps on the >>>> harmony vocal or something. >>>> >>>> Given that you haven't been working in Pro tools too long, this all >>>> sounds good. Of course, you've been around the block before with other >>>> recording scenarios so no surprise :) >>>> >>>> Cheers, >>>> >>>> Slau >>>> >>>> On Dec 7, 2015, at 7:19 PM, Steve Sparrow <i...@sparrowsound.com.au >>>> <mailto:i...@sparrowsound.com.au>> wrote: >>>> >>>>> Hi guys. Here is a track i thought i’d share with you. I’d be >>>>> interested in your thoughts. >>>>> This recording was produced in p t at my studio Sparrow Sound studio. >>>>> Based in Brisbane Australia. >>>>> >>>>> Please find drop box link below. >>>>> >>>>> https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/10442917/paint%20your%20cactus%20green%20mp3/track01%20Lose%20Threads.mp3 >>>>> <https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/10442917/paint%20your%20cactus%20green%20mp3/track01%20Lose%20Threads.mp3> >>>>> This is an original song i put together a couple of years back, and >>>>> finally got round to recording. >>>>> all comments and thoughts welcome. >>>>> Steve >>>>> >>>>> Steve >>>>> >>>>> >>>>> >>>>> -- >>>>> You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google >>>>> Groups "Pro Tools Accessibility" group. >>>>> To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send >>>>> an email to ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com >>>>> <mailto:ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com>. >>>>> For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/d/optout >>>>> <https://groups.google.com/d/optout>. >>>> >>>> >>>> -- >>>> You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google >>>> Groups "Pro Tools Accessibility" group. >>>> To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send >>>> an email to ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com >>>> <mailto:ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com>. >>>> For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/d/optout >>>> <https://groups.google.com/d/optout>. >>> >>> >>> -- >>> You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups >>> "Pro Tools Accessibility" group. >>> To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an >>> email to ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com >>> <mailto:ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com>. >>> For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/d/optout >>> <https://groups.google.com/d/optout>. >> >> >> -- >> You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups >> "Pro Tools Accessibility" group. >> To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an >> email to ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com >> <mailto:ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com>. >> For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/d/optout >> <https://groups.google.com/d/optout>. > > -- > You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups > "Pro Tools Accessibility" group. > To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an > email to ptaccess+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com. > For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/d/optout. > -- Vaughn Brown Berklee College of Music Graduate, Bachelor in Music, Drummer, educator 504-202-8492 http://www.vaughnbrown.net -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Pro Tools Accessibility" group. 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