Med,

The remainder of these are covered in 
https://github.com/bfd-wg/optimized-auth/pull/75

> On Sep 5, 2025, at 2:29 AM, [email protected] wrote:
> Consistent with other changes in this doc set, we need to highlight that this 
> is for an experimental feature:
> 
> OLD:
>       "This YANG module augments the base BFD YANG model to add
>        attributes related to BFD Optimized Authentication.
> 
> NEW:
>       "This YANG module augments the base BFD YANG model to add
>        attributes related to the experimental BFD Optimized Authentication.

Done.

>>> # Redundant behavior
>>> 
>>> Section 3
>>>  The contents of an Up packet MUST NOT change aside from the
>>>  Authentication Section without strong authentication.
>>> 
>>> Vs.
>>> 
>>> Section 6:
>>>  In this specification, the contents of an Up packet MUST NOT
>> change
>>>  aside from the Authentication Section without strong
>> authentication.
>>> 
>>> Keep the normative language in one place.
>> 
>> The text serves as an emphasis on the procedures and I suggest
>> keeping each of the instances.
> 
> [Med] You can keep the instances, but my suggestion was to keep the normative 
> language only once.

I've chosen to lower-case the section 3 instance.

I would not be shocked if someone else in later review notes this as a 
discrepancy.

>>> # YANG terminology
>>> 
>>> CURRENT:
>>>  This YANG module imports YANG Key Chain [RFC8177], A YANG Data
>> Model
>>>  for Routing Management (NMDA version) [RFC8349], and YANG Data
>> Model
>>>  for Bidirectional Forwarding Detection (BFD) [RFC9314].
>>> 
>>> This should reason about importing the various modules, not data
>>> models. Please refer to 8407bis which says:
>>> 
>>> "Likewise, "YANG module" should be used when using terms related
>> to
>>> YANG module specifications (e.g., augmentation or deviation)."
>>> 
>> 
>> I suspect this comment is incorrect.  Each of the points of
>> complaint are the title of the RFC in question.  :-)
> 
> [Med] You can keep the titles but the point is that we don't import RFCs but 
> modules. You can fix this by saying "This YANG module imports modules defined 
> in ...". Thanks.

Done.

>>> 
>>> # Security template
>>> 
>>> Please update 10.2 to follow the template in RFC8407bis.
>> 
>> I've done so.  Given that the template isn't fully genericized,
>> please check the implemented.
> 
> [Med] I suggest we make this change:
> 
> OLD:
>   Some of the readable data nodes in this YANG module may be considered
>   sensitive or vulnerable in some network environments.  It is thus
>   important to control read access (e.g., via get, get-config, or
>   notification) to these data nodes.  Specifically, the following
>   subtrees and data nodes have particular sensitivities/
>   vulnerabilities:
> 
>   There are no read-only data nodes defined in this model.
> 
> NEW:
> 
>   There are no particularly sensitive readable data nodes.

Done.  However, note 8407bis-28's current text is what lead me to the prior 
text.  Consider recommending a change to that document that closes the gap.

-- Jeff

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