[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-tsvwg-addip-sctp-20.txt
I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-tsvwg-addip-sctp-20.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2007-05-16 IETF LC End Date: 2007-05-18 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Almost Ready Comments: I have only one major comment: the abstract doesn't reach the requirements for abstracts, in particular it is too short. I have no strong idea about what to add, perhaps a statement about what the document provides or about its goals... Some minor points (which should be handled by the RFC editor if you don't publish a new version): - 3 page 5: 2*32 - 1 - 2**32 - 1 (IMHO the right notation is with a ** and spaces around the -) - 4 page 5: and, seven - and seven ? - 4.1.1 page 7: message i.e. - message, i.e., - 4.2 page 8: Table 2, 3 and 4 - Tables 2, 3 and 4 ? - 4.2.3 page 11: Error Cause(s) or Return Info on Success - Error Cause(s) ? - 4.2.4 page 12: The Set Primary IP Address parameter may appear in the ASCONF Chunk, the INIT, or the INIT-ACK chunk type. remove ^ - 4.3 page 15: illegal ASCONF-ACK - illegal ASCONF-ACK. - 4.3.4 page 18: 2^^31-1 - 2**31 - 1 - 5.1.1 page 21 C5: a minimal path MTU. The minimum PMTU choose between minimal and minimum and use path MTU in place of PMTU - 5.2 page 22: (i.e. - (i.e., - 5.2 page 22: insert a blank line before E1 - 5.2 page 23: insert a blank line before E2 and V3 - 5.2 page 24 V4: e.g. - e.g., - 5.2 page 24 E7: PMTU - path MTU - 5.3 page 24 F0: 2^^31-1 - 2**31 - 1 - 5.3 page 25 F1: The receiver of the add IP address request may use the address as a destination immediately. The receiver MUST use the path verification procedure for the added address before using that address. This is a bit confusing... - 5.3.1 page 28: rule D4 - rule F4 - 5.4 page 29: (i.e. - (i.e., - 5.5 page 30: other i.e. - other, i.e., - 5.5 page 30: Each new ASCONFs lookup - Each new ASCONF lookup - 6 page 30: modfiy - modify Regards [EMAIL PROTECTED] ___ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
[Gen-art] Review assignments for 24 May 2007
Hi all, Here's the link to the assignments for the May 24th, 2007 telechat: http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/reviewers-070524.html With the updated spreadsheets: http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art.html http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-by-reviewer.html For your convenience, the review boilerplate template is included below. Mary. --- I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: Reviewer: Review Date: IESG Telechat date: 24 May 2007 Summary: Comments: ___ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
[Gen-art] A *new* batch of IETF LC reviews - 17 May 2007
Hi all, Here's this week's LC assignments: http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art.html http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-by-reviewer.html The standard template is included at the end of the assignments. Thanks, Mary. --- Reviewer: Sharon Chisholm - 'Common RADIUS Implementation Issues and Suggested Fixes ' draft-ietf-radext-fixes-03.txt as a Proposed Standard IETF LC ends on 2007-05-28. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-radext-fixes-03.txt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 15576rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: Spencer Dawkins - 'DHCPv6 Leasequery ' draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-leasequery-00.txt as a Proposed Standard IETF LC ends on 2007-05-28. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-leasequery-00. txt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 15876rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: David Black - 'Using the Host Identity Protocol with Legacy Applications ' draft-ietf-hip-applications-01.txt as an Experimental RFC IETF LC ends on 2007-05-28. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-hip-applications-01.txt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 15488rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: Eric Gray - 'Host Identity Protocol (HIP) Domain Name System (DNS) Extensions ' draft-ietf-hip-dns-09.txt as an Experimental RFC IETF LC ends on 2007-05-28. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-hip-dns-09.txt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 12489rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: Francis Dupont - 'DHCPv6 Relay Agent Echo Request Option ' draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-ero-01.txt as a Proposed Standard IETF LC ends on 2007-05-28. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-ero-01.txt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 15436rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: Gonzalo Camarillo - 'RADIUS Extension for Digest Authentication ' draft-ietf-radext-rfc4590bis-01.txt as a Proposed Standard IETF LC ends on 2007-05-29. Note that the document includes a Normative Reference to RFC 3579 which is an Informational RFC. This down reference was already approved for RFC 4590. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-radext-rfc4590bis-01.txt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 15568rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: Robert Sparks - 'Applying Signaling Compression (SigComp) to the Session Initiation Protocol (SIP) ' draft-ietf-rohc-sigcomp-sip-06.txt as a Proposed Standard IETF LC ends on 2007-05-29. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-rohc-sigcomp-sip-06.txt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 10482rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: Scott Brim - 'Session Initiation Protocol Package for Voice Quality Reporting Event' draft-ietf-sipping-rtcp-summary-02.txt as a Proposed Standard IETF LC ends on 2007-05-31. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-sipping-rtcp-summary-02.t xt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 14087rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: Brian Carpenter - 'Reclassification of RFC 3525 to Historic ' draft-taylor-megaco-obsol3525-01.txt as a Historic IETF LC ends on 2007-06-08. The file can be obtained via http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-taylor-megaco-obsol3525-01.txt IESG discussion can be tracked via https://datatracker.ietf.org/public/pidtracker.cgi?command=view_iddTag= 15996rfc_flag=0 --- Reviewer: Christian Vogt The IESG has received a request from an individual submitter to consider reclassifying the following RFCs as Historic: RFC 3340 'The Application Exchange Core' RFC 3341 'The Application Exchange (APEX) Access Service' RFC 3342 'The Application Exchange (APEX) Option Party Pack, Part Deux!' RFC 3343 'The Application Exchange (APEX) Presence Service' The IESG will also consider publication of Reclassification of the APEX RFCs to Historic draft-mrose-apex-historic-01.txt as an Informational RFC. The original documents were a product of an individual submitter. IETF LC ends on 2007-06-13. The file can be obtained via
