[Gen-art] A *new* batch of IETF LC reviews - 04 Feb 2010

[Mary Barnes]

Hi all,

Here's the link to the new LC assignments for this week:
*http://www.softarmor.com/rai/temp-gen-art/reviewers-100204-lc.html*

The assignments are captured in the spreadsheets:
*http://www.softarmor.com/rai/temp-gen-art/gen-art.html*
*http://www.softarmor.com/rai/temp-gen-art/gen-art-by-reviewer.html*

The standard template is included below.


Thanks,
Mary.

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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
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Document:
Reviewer:
Review Date:
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[Gen-art] gen-art review of draft-ietf-mpls-typed-wildcard-05

[Scott Brim]

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
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Please wait for direction from your document shepherd
or AD before posting a new version of the draft.

Document: draft-ietf-mpls-typed-wildcard-05
Reviewer: Scott Brim
Review Date: February 04, 2010
Last call date: February 08, 2010

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as Informational RFC.

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Re: [Gen-art] Gen Art LC review of: draft-ietf-sipcore-199-02 - Avshalom's comments

[Christer Holmberg]

Hi,
 
Below are my replies to Avshalom's comments.

>Minor issues: 
>   
>11. Security section 
>Seems too short for this type of proposal. May need to reference security 
>sections in relevant other RFCs. 

[Christer] I will add the references to the security section. As far as the 
content of the section is concerned, I am not really sure what else I could 
add. But, I will think about it.

-

>Nits/editorial comments: 
>   
>Section 3: Requirements 
>A single requirement is listed without any wording around it. A bit of 
>explanantion may help. 

[Christer] Based on other comments, I have suggested to remove the whole 
section, because I don't know if it belongs to the spec.

-

>Section 4.1 Examples of resource types 
>Some benefits from resourc types are listed and then there are several 
>paragraphs whose context is not very clear. 

[Christer] I will double check the text, but I would be happy if you could 
point to some specific text which you think is unclear :)

Based on Cullen's comments, I will at least take a second look on the sentence 
related to latching.

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>   Line 380: 
>  the 199 response unreliable, or include an SDP offer with no m- 
> lines 
>   ->the 199 response unreliably, or include an SDP offer with no m- 
> lines 

[Christer] I'll fix that.

-

>   Line 381: 
>  in the reliable 199 response. 
>   ->in a reliable 199 response. 

[Christer] I'll fix that.

-

>   Line 384: 
>  is only used for information purpose, the UAS SHOULD send it 
>   ->is only used for information purposes, the UAS SHOULD send it 
>   (not sure if it should be fixed, current wording not fluent either) 

[Christer] I suggest:

"Since the 199 provisional response is used only for information purpose a UAS 
SHOULD, when sending the
response, send it unreliably even if the 100rel option tag [RFC3262] is present 
in the
Require header of the associated request."

Regards,

Christer


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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt

[Lou Berger]

Will do & great catch!!

Lou
-Original Message-
From:  Adrian Farrel 
Date: Thu, 04 Feb 2010 16:42:50 
To: Miguel A. Garcia; ; 
; 
Cc: General Area Review Team
Subject: Re: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt

Hi Miguel,

I think IANA owns the MIB module.

You're right, we should chase IANA to make sure they understand what to do.

Lou, can you ping them?

A
- Original Message -
From: "Miguel A. Garcia" 
To: ; ;
; 
Cc: "General Area Review Team" 
Sent: Thursday, February 04, 2010 8:08 AM
Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt

>I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
> reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
> http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
>
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
>
> Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt
> Reviewer: Miguel Garcia 
> Review Date: 04-Feb-2010
> IETF LC End Date: 05-Feb-2010
> IESG Telechat date: (if known)
>
> Summary: The document is ready for publication as a Standards track RFC.
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
>
> The document is well written and very clear. My only concern lies in
> Section 4.1, last paragraph:
>
>It should be noted that the assigned value should be reflected in
>IANAGmplsSwitchingTypeTC at
>http://www.iana.org/assignments/ianagmplstc-mib.
>
> So, I don't really know if IANA needs to modify the MIB, or someone needs
> to modify the MIB and uploaded to IANA, or nothing is supposed to happen
> here. I noticed in the I-D tracker that IANA is not planning to take any
> action with respect the MIB, is this the authors' intention?
>
> /Miguel
>
> --
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> +34-91-339-3608
> Ericsson Spain
>


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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt

[Adrian Farrel]

Hi Miguel,

I think IANA owns the MIB module.

You're right, we should chase IANA to make sure they understand what to do.

Lou, can you ping them?

A
- Original Message - 
From: "Miguel A. Garcia" 
To: ; ; 
; 

Cc: "General Area Review Team" 
Sent: Thursday, February 04, 2010 8:08 AM
Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt


I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia 
Review Date: 04-Feb-2010
IETF LC End Date: 05-Feb-2010
IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary: The document is ready for publication as a Standards track RFC.

Nits/editorial comments:

The document is well written and very clear. My only concern lies in 
Section 4.1, last paragraph:


   It should be noted that the assigned value should be reflected in
   IANAGmplsSwitchingTypeTC at
   http://www.iana.org/assignments/ianagmplstc-mib.

So, I don't really know if IANA needs to modify the MIB, or someone needs 
to modify the MIB and uploaded to IANA, or nothing is supposed to happen 
here. I noticed in the I-D tracker that IANA is not planning to take any 
action with respect the MIB, is this the authors' intention?


/Miguel

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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-gould-rfc4310bis-03

[Alexey Melnikov]

Gonzalo Camarillo wrote:


Hi,
 


Hi Gonzalo,


I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.


Draft: draft-gould-rfc4310bis-03
Reviewer: Gonzalo Camarillo 
Review Date: 4 February 2010

Summary:

This draft is ready for publication as a PS RFC.
 


Thanks.


Comments:

The ID nits tool complains about the following reference:

 ** Obsolete normative reference: RFC 3757 (ref. '9') (Obsoleted by RFC
4033, RFC 4034, RFC 4035)
 


I believe this is intentional.

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[Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-gould-rfc4310bis-03

[Gonzalo Camarillo]

Hi,

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.


Draft: draft-gould-rfc4310bis-03
Reviewer: Gonzalo Camarillo 
Review Date: 4 February 2010

Summary:

This draft is ready for publication as a PS RFC.


Comments:

The ID nits tool complains about the following reference:

  ** Obsolete normative reference: RFC 3757 (ref. '9') (Obsoleted by RFC
 4033, RFC 4034, RFC 4035)


Thanks,

Gonzalo


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[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt

[Miguel A. Garcia]

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-dcsc-channel-ext-03.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia 
Review Date: 04-Feb-2010
IETF LC End Date: 05-Feb-2010
IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary: The document is ready for publication as a Standards track RFC.

Nits/editorial comments:

The document is well written and very clear. My only concern lies in 
Section 4.1, last paragraph:


   It should be noted that the assigned value should be reflected in
   IANAGmplsSwitchingTypeTC at
   http://www.iana.org/assignments/ianagmplstc-mib.

So, I don't really know if IANA needs to modify the MIB, or someone needs 
to modify the MIB and uploaded to IANA, or nothing is supposed to happen 
here. I noticed in the I-D tracker that IANA is not planning to take any 
action with respect the MIB, is this the authors' intention?


/Miguel

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