Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-nfsdirect-07.txt
In your previous mail you wrote: Francis: -08 is on the Telechat for this week. Please check if your concerns were resolved. = they were (BTW they were editorial) so I keep the Ready summary. Thanks [EMAIL PROTECTED] PS: I copy my answer to the gen-art list for the archives. ___ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-nfsdirect-07.txt
In your previous mail you wrote: At 11:57 AM 3/21/2008, Francis Dupont wrote: I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft ... Editorial: - 3 page 3, etc: about the case of read/write: operations should get all uppercase, list only the first letter and other all lowercase. In term of grammar: nouns are in all uppercase, adjective one uppercase, verb all lowercase. Applying this: ... 4 page 5: RDMA READs and RDMA READ ... I have incorporated almost all of your comments, but felt I should indicate why I did not take just one in particular. The terms RDMA Read and RDMA Write are used consistently with these letter cases throughout RFC5040 and other documents, so it seems best to retain their style here. Your observation did lead me to fix a couple of other inconsistencies, however! = the rule itself does not matter, what is important is to have one and to apply it consistently (:-)! Thanks for the careful review. Acknowledgment being spelled inconsistently was a particular surprise! :-) = in fact IMHO both spellings exist but the RFC Editor decided for one (and again one had to be chosen and to become the only one to be used). Thanks [EMAIL PROTECTED] ___ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-nfsdirect-07.txt
At 11:57 AM 3/21/2008, Francis Dupont wrote: I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft ... Editorial: - 3 page 3, etc: about the case of read/write: operations should get all uppercase, list only the first letter and other all lowercase. In term of grammar: nouns are in all uppercase, adjective one uppercase, verb all lowercase. Applying this: ... 4 page 5: RDMA READs and RDMA READ ... I have incorporated almost all of your comments, but felt I should indicate why I did not take just one in particular. The terms RDMA Read and RDMA Write are used consistently with these letter cases throughout RFC5040 and other documents, so it seems best to retain their style here. Your observation did lead me to fix a couple of other inconsistencies, however! Thanks for the careful review. Acknowledgment being spelled inconsistently was a particular surprise! :-) Tom. ___ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-nfsdirect-07.txt
I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-nfsv4-nfsdirect-07.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2008-03-21 IETF LC End Date: 2008-03-26 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Comments: some editorial comments (editorial == to be handled by the RFC Editor by default) and 3 questions (with positive answers): - first question: is the document good for standard track or BCP is better? There are many similar documents in standard track and this document should be handled as its companion drafts, so IMHO there is no issue with standard track. - should NFS and RDMA be more introduced. As this document is for people with a good knowledge of NFS and RDMA IMHO it doesn't need this kind of things. - should RPC abbrev be introduced in the Abstract? As it is a concept (and should be very well known) IMHO I don't think so, i.e., keep the Abstract. Editorial: - 2 page 3: the XDR abbrev should be introduced - 3 page 3, etc: about the case of read/write: operations should get all uppercase, list only the first letter and other all lowercase. In term of grammar: nouns are in all uppercase, adjective one uppercase, verb all lowercase. Applying this: 3 page 3: null Write list 4 page 5: RDMA READs and RDMA READ 5.1 page 7: as READ or WRITE 6 page 8: RDMA READ ad RDMA WRITE (It is possible I've missed some) Spelling: - TOC and 9 page 9: Acknowledgments Regards [EMAIL PROTECTED] PS: the version on the gen-art site is the 06? ___ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
