Peter, thanks for your review. Pascal, thanks for your response. I entered a No
Objection ballot.
Best,
Alissa
> On Feb 18, 2020, at 10:21 AM, Pascal Thubert (pthubert)
> wrote:
>
> Many thanks for your review Peter!
>
> I applied all your typo fix suggestions that are not discussed below.
>
>> Page 14, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: change “a same” to one of “any”, “any
>> single”, or something similar. These suggestions are based on the assumption
>> that fragments from disparate datagrams are not intermingled, otherwise
>> you’ll need some other description of what you want to do in order to allow
>> fragments to get a few hops away.
>
> You're right, that can be any frame. Proposed change to:
> "
> When a single frequency is used by contiguous hops, the sender should insert
> a delay between the frames (e.g., frames carrying fragments) that are sent to
> the same next hop. The delay should cover multiple transmissions so as to let
> a frame progress a few hops and avoid hidden terminal issues.
> "
>
>> Page 18, section 7.1, inter-frame gap, 2nd sentence: change “a same” to “the
>> same” in both places in the sentence. Overall, I couldn’t quite parse this
>> sentence. “may be subject to receive while transmitting” left me guessing as
>> to what exactly you wanted to convey here. Please rewrite this sentence.
>
> Actually I did a few lines ahead but forgot to erase those : ) There's also
> section 4.2.
> So why nit just erase the weird sentence? We then get
>
> "
> An implementation must control the rate at which it sends packets
> over the same path to allow the next hop to forward a packet before
> it gets the next. In a wireless network that uses the same frequency
> along a path, more time must be inserted to avoid hidden terminal
> issues between fragments (more in Section 4.2).
>
> This is controlled by the following parameter:
>
> inter-frame gap: Indicates the minimum amount of time between
> transmissions. The inter-frame gap protects the propagation of
> one transmission before the next one is triggered and creates a
> duty cycle that controls the ratio of air time and memory in
> intermediate nodes that a particular datagram will use.
> "
>
>
>
>> Page 19, OptFragmentSize
> Delete “of” before “the Hop Limit”.
>
> Unsure: The Hop Limit is a field that can be compressed at the first hop and
> will need to be expanded later.
>
>
> Many thanks for your care, Peter. I looked up and fixed other occurrences of
> the similar French and I hope the doc reads better now.
>
> If you agree with the points above I'll submit a new round asap, maybe
> together with another review.
>
> All the best,
>
> Pascal
>
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