[Tails-dev] Please review doc/7143-virtualization
I've been silently working for a while on fixing our oldest hole in the roof: Adapt documentation from Incognito! So please review doc/7143-virtualization. Consider this as an initial version, and please comment on it. There are still probably quite a lot of things to adjust. -- sajolida ___ Tails-dev mailing list Tails-dev@boum.org https://mailman.boum.org/listinfo/tails-dev To unsubscribe from this list, send an empty email to tails-dev-unsubscr...@boum.org.
Re: [Tails-dev] Please review doc/7143-virtualization
Hi, sajolida wrote (19 Jan 2015 23:10:07 GMT) : > I've been silently working for a while on fixing our oldest hole in the > roof: Adapt documentation from Incognito! \o/ > So please review doc/7143-virtualization. > Consider this as an initial version, and please comment on it. There are > still probably quite a lot of things to adjust. Merged master into it, added a few commits on top. Comments: * "When running Tails in a virtual machine, you can use all the features of Tails" seems pretty bold, and is not always true. * config/chroot_local-includes/usr/local/bin/tails-virt-notify-user still points to doc/advanced_topics/virtualization.en.html; should it point to the #security anchor on that page instead? * "if the host operating system uses swap" --> not all OSes use the word "swap" (see the corresponding — "Paging" — page on Wikipedia); WP's page is highly technical, so I wouldn't recommend pointing to it, but it's probably worth mentioning other well-spread synonyms. * "The Tails virtual machine does not modify the behaviour of the host operating system and its network traffic is not anonymized" --> not clear what "its" refers to. * I'm dubious about the use of "Virt-manager": on my sid system, it's called "Virtual Machine Manager". That's also the title of its web homepage. And in other places, its author call it "virt-manager". I've never seen it called "Virt-manager", so I propose to pick one of the two widespread wording instead. * "With the shared folders feature of VirtualBox you can access files of your host system from within the guest system." --> IMO that's blocked by, and should point to, the piece of doc about the risks of accessing the local hard disk from Tails, that (IIRC) BitingBird has been working on. * I suggest always using a non-breakable whitespace between "OS" and "X", in "OS X", to avoid slightly ugly and confusing rendering in the browser. Yay, nitpicking ;) * "For instructions on how to install VirtualBox on other operating systems, refer to their official documentation" --> "their" seems to refer to "other operating systems", which is obviously not what you mean. * "1. Start VirtualBox. To create a new virtual machine: 1. Choose Machine ▸ New" -> the single "1." initial bullet feels strange. * "if the virtual machine is to have a 32-bit processor" --> missing word? either "configured to have" or "configured with". * "choose Choose a virtual CD/DVD disk file" feels strange. Maybe that's a case where we shouldn't follow the doc style guidelines too rigidly. I've not looked at the Boxes and virt-manager pages yet. I'll do that in a next iteration, once the above issues are fixed. Impressive work! Cheers, -- intrigeri ___ Tails-dev mailing list Tails-dev@boum.org https://mailman.boum.org/listinfo/tails-dev To unsubscribe from this list, send an empty email to tails-dev-unsubscr...@boum.org.
Re: [Tails-dev] Please review doc/7143-virtualization
intrigeri: > sajolida wrote (19 Jan 2015 23:10:07 GMT) : > * "When running Tails in a virtual machine, you can use all the > features of Tails" seems pretty bold, and is not always true. What about saying "most", then? See cfcbd75+c35f34d. > * config/chroot_local-includes/usr/local/bin/tails-virt-notify-user > still points to doc/advanced_topics/virtualization.en.html; should > it point to the #security anchor on that page instead? Done in 20c8b39. I also fixed the French translation but not the others as it is the only one handled through Git (I think!). > * "if the host operating system uses swap" --> not all OSes use the > word "swap" (see the corresponding — "Paging" — page on Wikipedia); > WP's page is highly technical, so I wouldn't recommend pointing to > it, but it's probably worth mentioning other well-spread synonyms. Nice, I didn't remember that from my CS classes :) So I did 8a1a0a8. The terminology here might not be 100% exact as there seem to be intricate subtleties around that issue, see https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Paging#Paging_vs._swapping. But I'm not sure we want to get into that... Ah, I also did a4ecd7c. Please make sure it's correct. > * "The Tails virtual machine does not modify the behaviour of the host > operating system and its network traffic is not anonymized" --> not > clear what "its" refers to. Fixed in a4ecd7c. I added it because I remember someone asking this! > * I'm dubious about the use of "Virt-manager": on my sid system, it's > called "Virtual Machine Manager". That's also the title of its web > homepage. And in other places, its author call it "virt-manager". > I've never seen it called "Virt-manager", so I propose to pick one > of the two widespread wording instead. We always call it "virt-manager", so I'd prefer that to "Virtual Machine Manager". Regarding capitalization, you're right, they always spell it in low caps, even at the beginning of a sentence like in their README: https://git.fedorahosted.org/cgit/virt-manager.git/tree/README. > * "With the shared folders feature of VirtualBox you can access files > of your host system from within the guest system." --> IMO that's > blocked by, and should point to, the piece of doc about the risks of > accessing the local hard disk from Tails, that (IIRC) BitingBird has > been working on. Marked as such on Redmine. > * I suggest always using a non-breakable whitespace between "OS" and > "X", in "OS X", to avoid slightly ugly and confusing rendering in > the browser. Yay, nitpicking ;) nbsp; for the win! → f999a8d > * "For instructions on how to install VirtualBox on other operating > systems, refer to their official documentation" --> "their" seems to > refer to "other operating systems", which is obviously not what > you mean. Done in 39bef26. > * "1. Start VirtualBox. > To create a new virtual machine: > 1. Choose Machine ▸ New" > -> the single "1." initial bullet feels strange. Done in 170ca46. > * "if the virtual machine is to have a 32-bit processor" --> > missing word? either "configured to have" or "configured with". Of course → 73cc357. > * "choose Choose a virtual CD/DVD disk file" feels strange. > Maybe that's a case where we shouldn't follow the doc style > guidelines too rigidly. > > I've not looked at the Boxes and virt-manager pages yet. I'll do that > in a next iteration, once the above issues are fixed. Done in 60689a9. So now we're only blocked by #5636: "Document how to access internal hard disks", right? -- sajolida ___ Tails-dev mailing list Tails-dev@boum.org https://mailman.boum.org/listinfo/tails-dev To unsubscribe from this list, send an empty email to tails-dev-unsubscr...@boum.org.
Re: [Tails-dev] Please review doc/7143-virtualization
Hi, sajolida wrote (01 Feb 2015 16:47:36 GMT) : > So now we're only blocked by #5636: "Document how to access internal > hard disks", right? I've reviewed all your changes up to, and including commit c35f34d4. It looks good! => yes. ___ Tails-dev mailing list Tails-dev@boum.org https://mailman.boum.org/listinfo/tails-dev To unsubscribe from this list, send an empty email to tails-dev-unsubscr...@boum.org.
