Bob,
Purely from the aesthetics level.
Drop the entire first page - or two - The very first one blinked on my screen for perhaps 3 seconds and was gone. The second was the spinning record. The main window - number three, is where I should land right off - no other pages between me and your main menu.
I suggest using the record in the main page (after dropping the first two pages). The record meaning is clear. As for the rear view mirror scene - I can understand it might be a visual reminder of the "reflective" character of the novel. Use it on a further page -perhaps on the "introduction" page instead of the animated pen-hand.
Overall - I really like the uncluttered appearance. Download was speedy - no hassle at all.
You may have a multitude of issues to contend with in the illustrated section. The disabilities act insists blind folks should have ready access. Have you thought that through yet? There are some previous discussions in the e-mail archives at WSG.
I went to the validator of w3c using XHTML transitional.
Here's the abbreviated error listing from the W3C validator for the 'record' page:
1.Line 32, column 179: there is no attribute "NAME"
2.Line 34, column 37: required attribute "TYPE" not specified
3. Line 41, column 40: required attribute "TYPE" not specified
4. Line 45, column 37: required attribute "TYPE" not specified
5. Line 48, column 17: document type does not allow element "NOSCRIPT" here; missing one of "APPLET", "OBJECT", "MAP", "IFRAME", "BUTTON" start-tag
6. Line 50, column 49: cannot generate system identifier for general entity "j"
7. Line 50, column 49: general entity "j" not defined and no default entity
8. Line 50, column 50: reference to entity "j" for which no system identifier could be generated
9. Line 50, column 48: entity was defined here
The validator then read: http://www.treyarnon.fsworld.co.uk/openingpage/opening.html and lists 7 errors that focus on the 'content' section near bottom of the XHTML page code for the flash movie:
1. Line 82, column 19: there is no attribute "src"
2. Line 82, column 43: there is no attribute "quality"
3. Line 82, column 62: there is no attribute "pluginspage"
4. Line 82, column 113: there is no attribute "type"
5. Line 82, column 151: there is no attribute "width"
6. Line 82, column 164: there is no attribute "height"
7. Line 82, column 169: element "embed" undefined
Will Jensen
Moscow, Russia
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On Dec 8, 2004, at 5:08 PM, Tom Livingston wrote:
Hello,
My only beef with this site is you seem to have *two* splash pages. One is bad enough...
Tom Livingston
Senior Multimedia Artist
mlinc.com
designer wrote:
Hi All,
I would be grateful for any and all feedback on a redesign I've done for a
site which presents an illustrated novel. Some of it is a weeny bit hybrid,
but (a small amount of flash aside) it all validates as xhtml and
presentational matter is down to an absolute minimum. I have not done
anything with the 'illustrations' section, as it needs a complete rewrite.
At the moment it can be seen at www.treyarnon.com - any helpful (or even
rude :-) comments welcome.
Thanks,
Bob McClelland,
Cornwall (U.K.)
www.gwelanmor-internet.co.uk
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