On Mon, 2008-05-12 at 13:14 -0700, Sharon Veach wrote:
> In paragraph 4 of section 4, you use the phrase "indirect labeling".
> Is this the same as implicit labeling?
> If so, continue to use implicit. If not, maybe you could provide a
> glossary of terms.
I've rewritten this to remove the use of the word "indirect".
And I've added a glossary.
> In paragraph 1 of 5.1, you refer to "plaintext' at the end of the paragraph.
> Is plaintext the text that is covered by the SADB_EXT_SENSITIVITY
> extension? If so, make the connection
> explicit. If not, maybe you could say where the plaintext is in the packet.
I've rewritten this somewhat to be clearer (it only refers to plaintext
in the context of ESP with confidentiality protection).
> Nits:
>
> is be > is
fixed.
>
> which will be used by in.iked ... >
> . This option is used by in.iked ....
fixed.
> mark its key management traffic exempt >
> to mark that its key management traffic is exempt ...
phrase was rewritten in response to another comment
> that the would >
> that they would
fixed.
- Bill
