On Tue, 2007-05-08 at 18:50 +0600, Vid Ayer wrote: > On 5/8/07, Gerry Carr <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > My name is Gerry Carr and I am the new Senior Marketing Manager for
Hi there! > > > > There is a draft of the wording which I have put on the wiki here: > > https://wiki.ubuntu.com/MarketingUbuntuLive2007Invite?highlight=%28marketing%29 > > Could you jazz up the wiki page a wee bit more. > - The sessions /speakers and topics part is one paragraph and is > difficult to read. > - Probably use bullets and keep it crisp, easy to read and find info. > - Provide posters to the US loco teams to publicise it at their > colleges/community LUG's. > Agreed. I'd also like to add that what struck me when I first skimmed through is that there's a bit too much emphasis on the "save money" aspect; which may be especially noticeable in a community where pretty much everything is free. "Save $150" is mentioned 3 times, when I only feel once is necessary; the first and last mentions being probably the most superfluous. It also seems to have a large amount of listing going on, which I guess is what Vid meant by "difficult to read". Maybe going into more detail is appropriate, or are we just looking at a brief announcement? Finally, I feel the language overall is well thought out, and definitely sets the lively tone we're wanting. My criticism is only such as I think that getting the right message across in the right manner is crucial, no matter what the product. Good work and welcome once again, Toby -- ubuntu-marketing mailing list ubuntu-marketing@lists.ubuntu.com Modify settings or unsubscribe at: https://lists.ubuntu.com/mailman/listinfo/ubuntu-marketing
