On Wed, Jun 27, 2012 at 01:23:16PM -0700, James Bradley wrote: > Here's the latest iteration on the flyer project. At this point, unless > someone can provide more fodder for the verbiage or constructive ideas > about the layout, I'll just be making minor refinements from here on out. > > Please take a moment to review the publication; Scribus doesn't have a > spell or grammar checker so be on the lookout for typos or things that > don't read right. Any feedback is welcome.
'remain committed to educating others' makes it sound like something happened and commitment wavered which I don't think is the case. I'd just go with 'are committed'. 'millions and millions' of people seems strange to me too. I think millions gets the point across. The mention of Debian will be confusing for people just reading about Ubuntu for the first time. I believe page one capitalize Open Source and page two does not. There is a period after 'creative pursuits.' but the sentence carries on. much like this one. 'hundreds of dollars just try something new' might be missing a 'to'. I might stick the contact information on both sides as I personally missed the url in the beginning and then at "the end" was wondering how to contact the team. Thanks it looks pretty neat! -- Brian Murray
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