Hi Derek,
I believe that the Innovation Awards entry submissions also begin March
10th, so we should consider keeping that banner if possible. Here are my
copy edits, not sure if some of these are wrong, but I include them anyways:
What is OpenSolaris?
The OpenSolaris project is an open development effort that consists of
three key elements:
(1) the OpenSolaris source code
[mo] remove comma
(2) the OpenSolaris community
[mo] remove comma
(3) /and now/, the OpenSolaris^TM operating system
[mo] add trademark, change 'binary distro' to 'operating system'
OpenSolaris is *free* to use, modify, and redistribute. We welcome
everyone to participate in the community.
[mo] change 'distribute' to 'redistribute', add period
The latest addition, the *OpenSolaris operating system*, is the first
delivery from Project Indiana
<http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/indiana/>.
[mo] change 'binary distro' to 'operating system'
The OpenSolaris operating system is a slimmed-down version of Solaris:
a core operating system, kernel, system libraries, desktop environment
and something new - a package management system
[mo] remove 'a' before 'desktop environment' for readability
tentatively known as the Image Package System
<http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/pkg/> (IPS).
The *OpenSolaris community <http://www.opensolaris.org/os/about/>*
represents a wide variety of people around the world, including
developers adding functionality to the system or customizing the
technology for new applications and platforms; system administrators
implementing Solaris technology in data centers; educators and students
researching operating systems in universities; and new users exploring
the technology and discovering that OpenSolaris offers new opportunities.
[mo] the paragraph above is a tough one, I give it a rewrite for clarity
and translation:
The *OpenSolaris community <http://www.opensolaris.org/os/about/>*
includes developers, system administrators, educators, students, and new
users around the world who are interested in adding functionality to the
system, customizing the technology for new applications and platforms,
implementing Solaris technology in data centers, researching operating
systems in universities, and exploring the new opportunities presented
by OpenSolaris.
The *OpenSolaris source code <http://src.opensolaris.org/source/>* is
already cutting edge, but innovation happens everywhere so we welcome
your involvement.
All else looks good, thanks for sending this out.
Michelle
Derek Cicero wrote:
> All,
>
> Using Tim's graphic I came up with this:
>
> http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/website/home_page_review/
>
> It would run until April 1, when we'd post the names of the new OGB
> members and then we'd take that down around 4/15.
>
> If there are no objection in the next 24 hours I'll post it?
>
> I assume all the folks on the editorial board are on this alias?
>
> Derek
>
>
> De Mena, Ron wrote:
>
>> +1 from me, if this is how the Website Review Committee is supposed to
>> function...
>>
>> --Ron
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of Rich Teer
>> Sent: Monday, March 03, 2008 9:56 AM
>> To: Tim Foster
>> Cc: website-discuss@opensolaris.org
>> Subject: Re: [website-discuss] Link to elections on homepage
>>
>> On Mon, 3 Mar 2008, Tim Foster wrote:
>>
>>
>>>> +1 for whatever election-related changes that our Secretary believes to be
>>>> appropriate.
>>>>
>>> If we are going to change the front page image, could we use the
>>> attached image instead of the current one ? The image could be a link to
>>> some sort of election summary/links page, which would probably be a good
>>> to have anyway.
>>>
>> Great idea!
>>
>>
>
>
>
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