On Wed, Dec 24, 2008 at 12:08 AM, Michelle Olson <[email protected]> wrote:
> Hi all,
>
> I've drafted a feature spot for the Starfish Project here:
>
> http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/website/content/home_page_draft_20/
>
> Let me know what you think.

Looks good. Some minor comments:

In the main paragraph.

NetBeans
Sun Studio
ON source code

could be hyperlinks to the relevant places.

I think 'nic' could be replaced by 'network'. There's a bit of
technological terminology in that sentence. Is creating ITUs
of general interest? Is there something else it does that's
more relevant to the average reader?

The bit 'analyzing system and core files' doesn't make sense.
System what?

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