DP,
I enjoyed all of these very much! They all communicate experience. There is no intrusion of the writer (no use of the pronoun 'I' or 'you' or 'they'. The last line on the last haiku has 6 syllables instead of 5, but other than that blip I think they're all VERY NICE! .Bill! From: Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com [mailto:zen_fo...@yahoogroups.com] On Behalf Of DP Sent: Wednesday, September 01, 2010 8:00 PM To: Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com Subject: Re: [Zen] Does anybody here write Haiku? Here are a few of mine. Clouds claw at the sun blackgrey smothers the blue sky cool wind on the way. Halfway to the goal red shirt runs up to the post shrieks of victory. Pink helmet blue dress locking bicycle in place new age commuter. Rain falls on the ground everywhere in glossy pools good day to be a duck. --- In Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> , <billsm...@...> wrote: > > DP, > > > > Occasionally, > > I put fingers to keyboard, > > And create Haiku. > > > > And you? Do you write? > > If so, would you share some poems? > > We would all like that. > > > > .Bill! > > > > From: Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> [mailto:Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> ] On Behalf > Of DP > Sent: Wednesday, September 01, 2010 8:37 AM > To: Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> > Subject: Re: [Zen] Does anybody here write Haiku? > > > > > > Well, do you write any more? :) > > --- In Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> , > <BillSmart@> wrote: > > > > Dave, > > > > > > > > First, five syllables, > > > > Second, seven syllables, > > > > Last line, five again. > > > > > > > > .Bill! > > > > > > > > From: Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> > [mailto:Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> ] On > Behalf > > Of DP > > Sent: Tuesday, August 31, 2010 9:46 PM > > To: Zen_Forum@yahoogroups.com <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> <mailto:Zen_Forum%40yahoogroups.com> > > Subject: [Zen] Does anybody here write Haiku? > > > > > > > > > > > > I have been writing them for a few months. I've been writing since I was a > > kid, but I find Haiku so relaxing and illuminating, because I love finding > > the right word. > > > > I've been doing traditional Haiku, that is keeping them about subjects > like > > nature and actions, rather than just using the form. > > > > > > > > > > > > __________ Information from ESET NOD32 Antivirus, version of virus > signature > > database 5413 (20100831) __________ > > > > The message was checked by ESET NOD32 Antivirus. > > > > http://www.eset.com > > > > > > > > __________ Information from ESET NOD32 Antivirus, version of virus signature > database 5413 (20100831) __________ > > The message was checked by ESET NOD32 Antivirus. > > http://www.eset.com > __________ Information from ESET NOD32 Antivirus, version of virus signature database 5416 (20100901) __________ The message was checked by ESET NOD32 Antivirus. http://www.eset.com
