Hi Murray,
Thanks for your review and comments. Please see my responses inline marked with
"AS>".
Cheers,
Ali
On 7/13/20, 10:50 PM, "Murray Kucherawy via Datatracker" <nore...@ietf.org>
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draft-ietf-bess-evpn-inter-subnet-forwarding-09: No Objection
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Bigger stuff:
I'll see Benjamin's DISCUSS (meaning I support it) and raise him the two
seemingly normative references to [TUNNEL-ENCAP], which is also undefined.
AS> Added the reference to tunnel-encap.
As someone not from the Routing Area, I found this a little hard to read
because it becomes quite dense with acronyms in some places.
Is Section 13 intended to remain in the final published version? Is it
needed?
AS> removed this one-line section since other RFCs don't have such an explicit
IPR section.
In the Abstract, please expand all acronyms on first use in the abstract,
per
the I-D Guidelines.
AS> Done.
Lesser stuff:
Thanks for the glossary in Section 1. I note that, although defined in the
glossary here, the terms "DGW", "Ethernet A-D route", "GRE", "GW IP", "IPL",
"ML", and "VXLAN" are not used anywhere else in this document.
AS> removed the unused terms.
There are lots of places where a single hyphen is used to break up a
sentence,
such as to introduce an example. These should be em dashes, or commas, or
maybe semicolons, but not simply hyphens.
AS> done.
A few nits:
Section 2:
* "... all the inter-subnet forwarding are performed ..." -- s/are/is/
AS> done.
* "... connected to the same PE, wanted to communicate ..." -- remove the
comma
AS> done.
Section 3:
* "A MAC-VRF can consists of one ..." -- either drop "can", or use "consist"
AS> done.
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