Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-bess-evpn-igmp-mld-proxy-13: No Objection
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Section 9.4. , paragraph 6, comment: > 0 1 2 3 > 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | Type=0x06 | Sub-Type=0x09| Flags (2 Octets) |M|I| > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | Reserved=0 | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ The "Type" field is only seven bits long - that seems to be an error? Section 9.5. , paragraph 20, comment: > 1 2 3 > 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | Type=0x06 | Sub-Type=n | RT associated with EVI | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | RT associated with the EVI (cont.) | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ This diagram is only 31 bits wide? You might want to use something like https://www.luismg.com/protocol/ to make sure your header diagrams are accurate. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you did with these suggestions. Section 11. , paragraph 2, nit: - provision to support IGMPv1. There may be an implemention which is + provision to support IGMPv1. There may be an implementation which is + ++ Section 12. , paragraph 2, nit: - TThis document does not add any new security considirattions, Same - ^ - + This document does not add any new security considerations, Same + - ^ "Table of Contents", paragraph 2, nit: > . . . . . . 18 9.2. Multicast Join Synch Route . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . > ^^^^^ Do not mix variants of the same word ("synch" and "sync") within a single text. "Table of Contents", paragraph 2, nit: > on of servers and switches are self contained and may have their own control > ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ This word is normally spelled with a hyphen. Section 3. , paragraph 18, nit: > triggering mechanism for the PEs to setup their underlay multicast tunnels. > ^^^^^ The verb "set up" is spelled as two words. The noun "setup" is spelled as one. Section 3. , paragraph 23, nit: > sage at the recipient EVPN speaker. Thus it helps create an IGMP overlay subn > ^^^^ A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Thus". Section 4.1.1. , paragraph 3, nit: > et (and v2 reset). The IE flag also need to be set accordingly. Since source > ^^^^ The verb form "need" does not seem to match the subject "flag". Section 5. , paragraph 4, nit: > with the v3 and exclude flag set. Finally when PE1 receives the IGMPv3 Join > ^^^^^^^ A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Finally". Section 5.2. , paragraph 2, nit: > GMP Membership Report was received. Thus it MUST only be imported by the PEs > ^^^^ A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Thus". Section 6.1. , paragraph 4, nit: > ses an IGMP Leave Synch route for that that (ES,BD). This route notifies the > ^^^^^^^^^ Possible typo: you repeated a word. Section 9.1. , paragraph 5, nit: > hosts by TORs. Upon receiving the hosts expression of interest of a particu > ^^^^^ An apostrophe may be missing. Section 9.3. , paragraph 3, nit: > not advertise this extended community so its absence indicates that the adver > ^^^ Use a comma before "so" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short). Section 9.3. , paragraph 12, nit: > for bit 15 means that PE does not supports IGMP Proxy. * Bit 14 (shown as M > ^^^^^^^^ The auxiliary verb "do" requires the base form of the verb. Section 9.3.1. , paragraph 4, nit: > re attached to the associated ES. Therefore these routes carry the ES-Import > ^^^^^^^^^ A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Therefore". Section 9.3.1. , paragraph 12, nit: > BD. The route is said to be associated associated with that BD. For each BD, > ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ Possible typo: you repeated a word. Section 9.5. , paragraph 12, nit: > registration policy should be "First Come First Served". 14. Acknowledgement > ^^^^ It seems that a comma is missing. Document references draft-ietf-bess-evpn-bum-procedure-updates-08, but -11 is the latest available revision. _______________________________________________ BESS mailing list BESS@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/bess
