Hi Murray, Thanks for the review!
Responses inline. On Sun, 7 Jun 2020 at 00:00, Murray Kucherawy via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> wrote: > > Murray Kucherawy has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-capport-architecture-08: No Objection > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > Pretty straightforward. Looking forward to the API document. > > Some nits: > > Although I see why you did it, the capitalization of the bullet list in > Section > 3.2 appears peculiar. > You're correct. I think the latter three bullets break the construction anyway, since they don't directly match the titles of the sections. We'll fix this up. > Also curious is that "User Equipment" is defined in Section 2.1, but not > shortened to "UE" anywhere other than in Section 3.5. > We should be consistent throughout the document. If it aids readability, I have no problem changing it to UE. Do you think that would help? > In Section 4.1, what's an "RA"? > > Router Advertisement (rfc4861). This section is discussing workflows related to https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-capport-rfc7710bis-02, which describes how router advertisements would be used in more detail. I suppose using the full term here would help clarify, though there is also an opportunity to reference rfc4861 -- I'm not sure whether that's necessary, since presumably someone seeking further clarification would read rfc7710bis, which references rfc4861. I'm happy to add the reference if you think it's necessary. Thanks! Kyle _______________________________________________ Captive-portals mailing list Captive-portals@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/captive-portals
