Hi Carey, sorry for the delay of my answer.
On Sun, 28 Dec 2014, Carey Walker wrote: > Here's a first attempt. Just one appendix for now. 99% style/readability - > haven't attempted anything much technical. It's good! I have merged it with a few fixes: > @@ -123,8 +123,8 @@ Documents Music Public</computeroutput> > <replaceable>file</replaceable> with > “<replaceable>text</replaceable>” as its contents. Adding a line > at the end of this file is possible too, with a command such as > - <command>echo "<replaceable>line</replaceable>" > - >><replaceable>file</replaceable></command>.</para> > + <command>echo "<replaceable>moretext</replaceable>" > + >><replaceable>file</replaceable></command>. Note the >> in this > example.</para> ">>" should have been ">>" and possibly marked with some tag: <literal>>></literal> > @@ -288,7 +288,8 @@ tmpfs 514208 269136 245072 53% > /dev/shm > <listitem> > <para><filename>/proc/</filename> and <filename>/sys/</filename> > are specific to the Linux kernel (and not part of the FHS). They > - are used by the kernel for exporting data to user-space.</para> > + are used by the kernel for exporting data to user-space > + (see the section following for a description of the User > Space).</para> > </listitem> Here you should put a real cross-reference link: (see <xref linkend="sect.userspace-presentation" /> and <xref linkend="sect.user-space" /> for explanations about this concept) > - <para>The restriction described here is only a corner > - case. The actual restriction is that there can only be one > + <para>The limitation described above of only one process being able to > run > + at a time, doesn't always apply. The actual restriction is that > there can only be one Try to wrap lines at 80 characters. > <para>For more complex communications, there are also mechanisms > allowing a process to open access, or share, part of its > - allocated memory to other processes. Memory shared between them > - can be used to move data across.</para> > + allocated memory to other processes. Memory now shared between them > + can be used to move data beteen the processes.</para> s/beteen/between/ Cheers, -- Raphaël Hertzog ◈ Debian Developer Support Debian LTS: http://www.freexian.com/services/debian-lts.html Learn to master Debian: http://debian-handbook.info/get/ -- To UNSUBSCRIBE, email to [email protected] with a subject of "unsubscribe". Trouble? Contact [email protected]
