Please find, for review, the debconf templates and packages descriptions for 
the miniupnpd source package.

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2013.

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Rationale:

Preamble: I'm not entirely happy with this review. I feel like the
whole debconf templates do no look very idiomatic but I found no way
to give them less French accent..:-)


--- miniupnpd.old/debian/miniupnpd.templates    2013-08-17 07:53:13.557776725 
+0200
+++ miniupnpd/debian/miniupnpd.templates        2013-08-22 09:29:43.789726277 
+0200
@@ -2,24 +2,24 @@
 Type: boolean
 Default: false
 _Description: Start the MiniUPnP daemon?
- Select if the MiniUPnP daemon should started automatically at boot time.
+ Please choose this option if you want to automatically start the MiniUPnP 
daemon at boot time.
 

Our usual formula...


 Template: miniupnpd/listen
 Type: string
-_Description: IP address to listen for UPnP queries on your LAN:
- The MiniUPnP daemon will listen for requests on your local network. Please
+_Description: IP address to listen for UPnP queries on the local network:
+ The MiniUPnP daemon will listen for requests on the local network. Please
  enter the IP address it should listen on.

Just avoid possessive articles.You know the rationale: "that might
not be "my" network.

 
 Template: miniupnpd/iface
 Type: string
 _Description: External WAN network interface where to open ports:
- The MiniUPnP daemon will listen on a specific IP address on your LAN, then it
- will open ports on your WAN interface. Enter the name of your WAN network
+ The MiniUPnP daemon will listen on a specific IP address on the local 
network, then it
+ will open ports on the WAN interface. Enter the name of the WAN network
  interface on which the MiniUPnP daemon will do the port forwarding.

Ditto.

 
 Template: miniupnpd/ip6script
 Type: boolean
 Default: false
-_Description: Enable ip6tables script?
- Uppon startup of the MiniUPnP daemon, the init script can initialize the
- MiniUPnP IPv6 firewall chain.
+_Description: Enable IPv6 firewall chain?
+ Please specify whether the MiniUPnP daemon should run its
+ ip6tables script on startup to initialize the IPv6 firewall chain.
--- miniupnpd.old/debian/control        2013-08-17 07:53:13.557776725 +0200
+++ miniupnpd/debian/control    2013-08-22 09:30:39.255328099 +0200

Already proposed by Justin, previously


@@ -13,10 +13,10 @@
 Depends: ${misc:Depends}, ${shlibs:Depends}, debconf, iptables, iproute, 
uuid-runtime, net-tools
 Description: daemon providing UPnP Internet Gateway Device (IGD) services
  MiniUPnPd is a small daemon providing UPnP Internet Gateway Device (IGD)
- services to your network. UPnP and NAT-PMP are used to improve internet
+ services to the network. UPnP and NAT-PMP are used to improve Internet
  connectivity for devices behind a NAT router. Any peer to peer network
  application such as games, IM, etc. can benefit from a NAT router supporting
- UPnP and/or NAT-PMP. For example the latest generation Microsoft XBOX 360 and
+ UPnP and/or NAT-PMP. For example, the latest generation Microsoft XBOX 360 and
  Sony Playstation 3 game machines use UPnP commands to enable the online play
  with the XBOX Live service and the Playstation Network. It has been reported
  that MiniUPnPd is correctly working with the two consoles.

Just some details asthe description seems fine to me.

Maybe explain somewhere what UPnP means?


-- 


Template: miniupnpd/start_daemon
Type: boolean
Default: false
_Description: Start the MiniUPnP daemon?
 Please choose this option if you want to automatically start the MiniUPnP 
daemon at boot time.

Template: miniupnpd/listen
Type: string
_Description: IP address to listen for UPnP queries on the local network:
 The MiniUPnP daemon will listen for requests on the local network. Please
 enter the IP address it should listen on.

Template: miniupnpd/iface
Type: string
_Description: External WAN network interface where to open ports:
 The MiniUPnP daemon will listen on a specific IP address on the local network, 
then it
 will open ports on the WAN interface. Enter the name of the WAN network
 interface on which the MiniUPnP daemon will do the port forwarding.

Template: miniupnpd/ip6script
Type: boolean
Default: false
_Description: Enable IPv6 firewall chain?
 Please specify whether the MiniUPnP daemon should run its
 ip6tables script on startup to initialize the IPv6 firewall chain.
--- miniupnpd.old/debian/miniupnpd.templates    2013-08-17 07:53:13.557776725 
+0200
+++ miniupnpd/debian/miniupnpd.templates        2013-08-22 09:29:43.789726277 
+0200
@@ -2,24 +2,24 @@
 Type: boolean
 Default: false
 _Description: Start the MiniUPnP daemon?
- Select if the MiniUPnP daemon should started automatically at boot time.
+ Please choose this option if you want to automatically start the MiniUPnP 
daemon at boot time.
 
 Template: miniupnpd/listen
 Type: string
-_Description: IP address to listen for UPnP queries on your LAN:
- The MiniUPnP daemon will listen for requests on your local network. Please
+_Description: IP address to listen for UPnP queries on the local network:
+ The MiniUPnP daemon will listen for requests on the local network. Please
  enter the IP address it should listen on.
 
 Template: miniupnpd/iface
 Type: string
 _Description: External WAN network interface where to open ports:
- The MiniUPnP daemon will listen on a specific IP address on your LAN, then it
- will open ports on your WAN interface. Enter the name of your WAN network
+ The MiniUPnP daemon will listen on a specific IP address on the local 
network, then it
+ will open ports on the WAN interface. Enter the name of the WAN network
  interface on which the MiniUPnP daemon will do the port forwarding.
 
 Template: miniupnpd/ip6script
 Type: boolean
 Default: false
-_Description: Enable ip6tables script?
- Uppon startup of the MiniUPnP daemon, the init script can initialize the
- MiniUPnP IPv6 firewall chain.
+_Description: Enable IPv6 firewall chain?
+ Please specify whether the MiniUPnP daemon should run its
+ ip6tables script on startup to initialize the IPv6 firewall chain.
--- miniupnpd.old/debian/control        2013-08-17 07:53:13.557776725 +0200
+++ miniupnpd/debian/control    2013-08-22 09:30:39.255328099 +0200
@@ -13,10 +13,10 @@
 Depends: ${misc:Depends}, ${shlibs:Depends}, debconf, iptables, iproute, 
uuid-runtime, net-tools
 Description: daemon providing UPnP Internet Gateway Device (IGD) services
  MiniUPnPd is a small daemon providing UPnP Internet Gateway Device (IGD)
- services to your network. UPnP and NAT-PMP are used to improve internet
+ services to the network. UPnP and NAT-PMP are used to improve Internet
  connectivity for devices behind a NAT router. Any peer to peer network
  application such as games, IM, etc. can benefit from a NAT router supporting
- UPnP and/or NAT-PMP. For example the latest generation Microsoft XBOX 360 and
+ UPnP and/or NAT-PMP. For example, the latest generation Microsoft XBOX 360 and
  Sony Playstation 3 game machines use UPnP commands to enable the online play
  with the XBOX Live service and the Playstation Network. It has been reported
  that MiniUPnPd is correctly working with the two consoles.
Source: miniupnpd
Section: net
Priority: optional
Maintainer: Thomas Goirand <z...@debian.org>
Build-Depends: debhelper (>= 9), iptables-dev, po-debconf, libnfnetlink-dev
Standards-Version: 3.9.4
Homepage: http://miniupnp.free.fr/
Vcs-Browser: http://anonscm.debian.org/gitweb/?p=users/zigo/miniupnpd.git
Vcs-Git: http://anonscm.debian.org/git/users/zigo/miniupnpd.git

Package: miniupnpd
Architecture: any
Depends: ${misc:Depends}, ${shlibs:Depends}, debconf, iptables, iproute, 
uuid-runtime, net-tools
Description: daemon providing UPnP Internet Gateway Device (IGD) services
 MiniUPnPd is a small daemon providing UPnP Internet Gateway Device (IGD)
 services to the network. UPnP and NAT-PMP are used to improve Internet
 connectivity for devices behind a NAT router. Any peer to peer network
 application such as games, IM, etc. can benefit from a NAT router supporting
 UPnP and/or NAT-PMP. For example, the latest generation Microsoft XBOX 360 and
 Sony Playstation 3 game machines use UPnP commands to enable the online play
 with the XBOX Live service and the Playstation Network. It has been reported
 that MiniUPnPd is correctly working with the two consoles.

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