Hi Drew, some general feedback from my side
1. Why section "Stable, reliable software Over 10 years of use at organizations, large and small, around the globe" I would say over 13 years 2. Apache feature page 1, right lower corner -> I would remove it there and would change the Apache logo in the middle and would use the color logo. 3. icons upper right corner second page -> I would remove them 4. Apache OpenOffice is a community -> how about "Apache OpenOffice is a community driven project" Juergen On 9/9/13 6:23 PM, Drew Jensen wrote: > Howdy all, > > Well, a little more work and some feedback led to this - which I now really > need feedback from you guys on. > > A couple of small changes - I noted the discussion on the mailing list > regarding the users posting to the dev mailing list, so I updated the > paragraph on the back cover to remove the reference to the dev list (I have > not updated the UnivStudent flyer to reflect this yet, but will) > > Some small typographic changes on the front cover and rear cover, dropped > the wire frame from the front page (inside flap), left it on the second > page - though I have two votes to dump it from there also. > > Anyway - the real focus, if I may draw you there, is again the why AOO > column. The bullet items are the points that I would like to make, but they > could I'm sure be made better. > > The lower section AOO is ODF compliant and AOO is a community I'm not > really comfortable with. I lifted some of the text from that 2.0 flyer, the > sentence with company names and I suppose for instance PeopleSoft no longer > gets a break out, it's just Oracle now, right.. anyhow you input is very. > > So - I guess I'll just use google still: > pdf > https://docs.google.com/file/d/0Bx7ZNEXlmR0IU2ZJbHVsQ2pOa3M > odt > https://docs.google.com/file/d/0Bx7ZNEXlmR0IWERCRVozbFBkYVk > > Thanks in advance for you time, > > //drew > > > On Fri, Sep 6, 2013 at 11:58 AM, Drew Jensen > <drewjensen.in...@gmail.com>wrote: > >> >> On Tue, Sep 3, 2013 at 7:38 PM, Drew Jensen >> <drewjensen.in...@gmail.com>wrote: >> >>> Juergen >> >> >> I started on an SME (which I suppose is Small /Medium Enterprise) piece, >> it's not that far along with respect to the Why column - but I did make a >> change to the graphical content, based on Juergen's comment regarding >> icons. So I'll put this up to google also, it's a throw back again to 2.0 >> branding, with the new color. >> >> pdf >> https://docs.google.com/file/d/0Bx7ZNEXlmR0IWFpNd3dSOTBCN3c >> odt >> https://docs.google.com/file/d/0Bx7ZNEXlmR0IZklSaHFSTk84Umc >> and the updated svg for the wireframe >> https://docs.google.com/file/d/0Bx7ZNEXlmR0IMzU0bnotSHFVMzA >> >> Anyway - SME is too broad for my purpose here and I will work tonight to >> focus a bit more on: >> Clerical staff and part-time elected officials in very small >> municipalities, which is the demographic of the room where my friend will >> be pitching his services.. >> >> As always - I don't own this stuff, feel free to make it better... >> >> //drew >> > --------------------------------------------------------------------- To unsubscribe, e-mail: dev-unsubscr...@openoffice.apache.org For additional commands, e-mail: dev-h...@openoffice.apache.org
