On Sun, 6 Jan 2013 03:21:43 +0400
Igor Murzov <intergalactic.anonym...@gmail.com> wrote:
> On Thu, 3 Jan 2013 17:55:21 +0900
> Carsten Haitzler (The Rasterman) <ras...@rasterman.com> wrote:
>
> > On Thu, 22 Nov 2012 02:05:00 +0400 Igor Murzov <e-m...@date.by> said:
> >
> > this is all fixed by now - but i think an extra , in one place could have
> > been
> > good - i added it in. :)
>
> "As a bi-product of this" and "as a result" in one sentence also looks like a
> bug:
>
> As a bi-product of this, Enlightenment will
> connect to enlightenment.org and transmit
> some information as a result
>
> I'll suggest dropping "as a result" part.
>
>
> -- Igor
>
> > > ---
> > > src/modules/wizard/page_170.c | 14 +++++++-------
> > > 1 file changed, 7 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-)
> > >
> > > diff --git a/src/modules/wizard/page_170.c b/src/modules/wizard/page_170.c
> > > index 7ae75b1..fe42877 100644
> > > --- a/src/modules/wizard/page_170.c
> > > +++ b/src/modules/wizard/page_170.c
> > > @@ -31,18 +31,18 @@ wizard_page_show(E_Wizard_Page *pg)
> > > e_widget_textblock_markup_set
> > > (ob,
> > > _("Enlightenment can check for new<br>"
> > > - "versions, updates, securiity and<br>"
> > > - "bugfixes, as well as available add-ons.<br>"
> > > + "versions, updates, security and<br>"
> > > + "bug fixes, as well as available add-ons.<br>"
> > > "<br>"
> > > "This is very useful, because it lets you<br>"
> > > - "you know about available bug fixes and<br>"
> > > + "know about available bug fixes and<br>"
> > > "security fixes when they happen. As a<br>"
> > > "bi-product of this, Enlightenment will<br>"
> > > "connect to enlightenment.org and transmit<br>"
> > > - "some information as a result much like any<br>"
> > > - "web browser might do. No personal information<br>"
> > > - "such as username, password or any personal<br>"
> > > - "files will be transmitted. If you do not like<br>"
> > > + "some information much like any web browser<br>"
> > > + "might do. No personal information such as<br>"
> > > + "username, password or any personal files<br>"
> > > + "will be transmitted. If you do not like<br>"
> > > "this, please disable this below. It is highly<br>"
> > > "advised that you do not disable this as it<br>"
> > > "may leave you vulnerable or having to live<br>"
> > > --
>
Dropping the "as a bi-product of this, " sounds much better
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