I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-mboned-rfc3171bis-07.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <miguel.a.gar...@ericsson.com>
Review Date: 19-October-2009
IETF LC End Date: 28-October-2009
Summary: The document is almost ready to be published as a BCP.
Major issues: none
Minor issues:
- Due to the nature of the draft, I think it makes sense to promote RFC
5226 to a normative reference.
Nits/editorial comments:
- In the cover page, the document says it obsoletes RFC 3171 and RFC 3138
(if approved). I am missing a line indicating that the document updates
RFC 2780. While this fact is reflected in Section 1, it is not reflected
in the cover page.
- Expand terms at the first occurrence. This includes:
Section 1: SDP, SAP, GLOP, SSM
Section 8: VMTP
Section 9: ASN
Section 9.2: RIR, AS, eGLOP
In relation to this, Section 9.2 contains two similar abbreviations:
eGLOP and EGLOP. Those are probably the same and should be unified.
- The document uses quite a few references to URLs. The RFC Editor does
not like this approach because URLs often change with time. So, I would
suggest to refer to the title of the web page instead. It might be
possible that the RFC Editor accepts the addition of a reference to a URL
(which should be valid for some time), but the main link should be done
to the content, not to the URL. This includes:
Section 1: http://www.iana.org/numbers.html
This page is already obsolete, and the URL redirects to
http://www.iana.org/protocols/
I suggest to refer to the "IANA Protocol Registries [IANA-protocols]",
and the link is in the reference [IANA-protocols].
Section 11: http://www.iana.org/protocols/apply
I suggest to refer to the "IANA Protocol Registration Forms
[IANA-registration]", moving the link to the [IANA-registration] reference.
- There is no reference to [SDR], used in Section 7.
- Reference to RFC 1190 is obsolete. RFC 1819 should be used instead.
- Reference to RFC 2030 is obsolete. RFC 4330 should be used instead.
/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia
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Ericsson Spain
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