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For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-p2psip-sip-17 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2016-04-06 IETF LC End Date: 2016-04-06 IESG Telechat date: 2016-04-21 Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 1] Abstract: some suggestions for clarity: -After "(RELOAD)" it would be clearer to add [rfc6940]. -"Uris"---->"URIs" -"the AppAttach method"---->"the RELOAD AppAttach method" I find the first paragraph of the Introduction more suitable for abstract text. The abstract should clarify which protocols are being extended here SIP, RELOAD, both. -[Page 4], "ICE" to be spelled out at first use. -[Page 7], "PDU" to be spelled out at first use. -[Page 12], "either SIP scheme"--->"either SIP schemes" -[Page 13], "Uris"---->"URIs" -[Page 13], "gr URI"--->" "gr" URI " -[Page 18], ietf-p2psip-share ref to be updated to latest Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
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