Hi Francis, Thanks for your review! We've posted a new -10 version of the document (https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-intarea-provisioning-domains-10).
> On Dec 27, 2019, at 12:49 AM, Francis Dupont <francis.dup...@fdupont.fr> > wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-intarea-provisioning-domains-09.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 20191220 > IETF LC End Date: 20191225 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > - 3.1 page 6: the real purpose of the R-flag / inclusion of a RA header > could be explained before examples of section 5, for instance in the > introduction... We've added a description of this optional "inner" header to the introduction. Thanks for the suggestion! > > - 3.4 page 10,3.4.3 page 11 (3 times) and 6 page 22 : e.g. -> e.g., Fixed =) > > - 4.4 page 17: I understand the text about the Subject Name (so it > is not a minor issue) but RFC 5280 defines the Subject as a X.500 > Distinguished Name so IMHO you mean the Subject Alternative Name. > I propose to add "(Alternative)" between "Subject" and "Name" so > the text should become fully correct without introducing extra / > spurious details. Updated to reference the Subject Alternate Name. > > - 8.3 page 24: Bit position 0, 1 and 2 are reserved -> assigned Fixed. Best, Tommy > > Merry Christmas and Happy New Year! > > francis.dup...@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
