Francis, thank you for your review. Tommy, thank you for addressing Francis’ comments. I entered a DISCUSS ballot to resolve a small issue with one of the references.
Best, Alissa > On Jan 6, 2020, at 12:59 PM, Tommy Pauly <tpauly=40apple....@dmarc.ietf.org> > wrote: > > Hi Francis, > > Thanks for your review! We've posted a new -10 version of the document > (https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-intarea-provisioning-domains-10). > >> On Dec 27, 2019, at 12:49 AM, Francis Dupont <francis.dup...@fdupont.fr> >> wrote: >> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area >> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed >> by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just >> like any other last call comments. >> >> For more information, please see the FAQ at >> >> <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-intarea-provisioning-domains-09.txt >> Reviewer: Francis Dupont >> Review Date: 20191220 >> IETF LC End Date: 20191225 >> IESG Telechat date: unknown >> >> Summary: Ready >> >> Major issues: None >> >> Minor issues: None >> >> Nits/editorial comments: >> - 3.1 page 6: the real purpose of the R-flag / inclusion of a RA header >> could be explained before examples of section 5, for instance in the >> introduction... > > We've added a description of this optional "inner" header to the introduction. > Thanks for the suggestion! > >> >> - 3.4 page 10,3.4.3 page 11 (3 times) and 6 page 22 : e.g. -> e.g., > > Fixed =) >> >> - 4.4 page 17: I understand the text about the Subject Name (so it >> is not a minor issue) but RFC 5280 defines the Subject as a X.500 >> Distinguished Name so IMHO you mean the Subject Alternative Name. >> I propose to add "(Alternative)" between "Subject" and "Name" so >> the text should become fully correct without introducing extra / >> spurious details. > > Updated to reference the Subject Alternate Name. > >> >> - 8.3 page 24: Bit position 0, 1 and 2 are reserved -> assigned > > Fixed. > > Best, > Tommy > >> >> Merry Christmas and Happy New Year! >> >> francis.dup...@fdupont.fr > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
