I have looked at this draft and support publication. (Well, actually I looked at draft-ietf-i2nsf-registration-interface-19.)
I like the clear top-down data model Some minor suggestions: Section 1: Expand DMS on first occurrence (it is currently expanded on 2nd occurance) Section 2: Maybe add a reference for OSI: "ISO/IEC 7498-4:1989 -- Information technology -- Open Systems Interconnection -- Basic Reference Model: Naming and addressing". Section 4.1.1.1, in the last two sentences: "two cases, outbound, inbound." -> "two cases: outbound and inbound." and "two information can" -> "two information items can". Section 5.1.2, at the top of page 9: "following purposes." -> "following purposes:" Section 7 (three times): "illegally modifying this" -> "modifying this without authorization". Section 7: "deteriorate" -> "reduce" Thanks, Donald =============================== Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA [email protected] On Sat, Jun 11, 2022 at 3:13 AM Linda Dunbar <[email protected]> <<[email protected]>> wrote: Hello Working Group, Many thanks to the authors of draft-ietf-i2nsf-registration-dm-17 to address all the comments from YANG Doctor review, SecDir review and OpsDIR review. This email starts a three weeks Working Group Last Call on draft-ietf-i2nsf-registration-dm-17 https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-i2nsf-registration-interface-dm/ This poll runs until July 1, 2021. We are also polling for knowledge of any undisclosed IPR that applies to this Document, to ensure that IPR has been disclosed in compliance with IETF IPR rules (see RFCs 3979, 4879, 3669 and 5378 for more details). If you are listed as an Author or a Contributor of this Document, please respond to this email and indicate whether or not you are aware of any relevant undisclosed IPR. The Document won't progress without answers from all the Authors and Contributors. If you are not listed as an Author or a Contributor, then please explicitly respond only if you are aware of any IPR that has not yet been disclosed in conformance with IETF rules. Thank you. Linda
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