Yes, this seems better. -Ekr
- On Sun, Jan 21, 2018 at 9:48 PM, Shraddha Hegde <shrad...@juniper.net> wrote: > Eric, > > > > I added more text to introduction section . Pls check if it helps improve > readability. > > > > “Many OSPFv2 or OSPFv3 deployments run on overlay networks provisioned > > by means of pseudo-wires or L2-circuits. Prior to devices in the > > underlying network going offline for maintenance, it is useful to > > divert the traffic away from the node before the maintenance is > > actually performed. Since the nodes in the underlying network are > > not visible to OSPF, the existing stub router mechanism described in > > [RFC6987] cannot be used. In a service provider's network, there may > > be many CE-to-CE connections that run over a single PE. It is > > cumbersome to change the metric on every CE-to-CE connection in both > > directions. This document provides a mechanism to change metric in > > other direction of the link and also use the link as a last-resort-link > if > > no alternate paths are available. An application specific to this > > use case is described in detail in Section 7.1.” > > > > > > > > rgds > > Shraddha > > *From:* Eric Rescorla [mailto:e...@rtfm.com] > *Sent:* Friday, January 19, 2018 12:09 AM > *To:* Shraddha Hegde <shrad...@juniper.net> > *Cc:* The IESG <i...@ietf.org>; draft-ietf-ospf-link-overl...@ietf.org; > ospf-cha...@ietf.org; a...@cisco.com; ospf@ietf.org > *Subject:* Re: Eric Rescorla's No Objection on > draft-ietf-ospf-link-overload-12: (with COMMENT) > > > > On Thu, Jan 18, 2018 at 10:31 AM, Shraddha Hegde <shrad...@juniper.net> > wrote: > > Hi Eric, > > Introduction section does have a brief description and refers to 7.1 for > detailed description of the use case. Moving detailed use case description > to introduction section will make it cluttered. > > Also there are other applications apart from 7.1 which also have a brief > description in the > Introduction and refer to application section for detailed description. > > > > Well, it's a comment, so you're free to ignore it, but as a consume of > this document, I found the current structure hard to follow. > > > > -Ekr > > > > > Rgds > Shraddha > > -----Original Message----- > From: Eric Rescorla [mailto:e...@rtfm.com] > Sent: Thursday, January 18, 2018 10:11 PM > To: The IESG <i...@ietf.org> > Cc: draft-ietf-ospf-link-overl...@ietf.org; Acee Lindem <a...@cisco.com>; > ospf-cha...@ietf.org; a...@cisco.com; ospf@ietf.org > Subject: Eric Rescorla's No Objection on draft-ietf-ospf-link-overload-12: > (with COMMENT) > > Eric Rescorla has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-ospf-link-overload-12: No Objection > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all > email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this > introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__www. > ietf.org_iesg_statement_discuss-2Dcriteria.html&d=DwICaQ&c= > HAkYuh63rsuhr6Scbfh0UjBXeMK-ndb3voDTXcWzoCI&r= > NyjLsr7JA7mvpCJa0YmPdVKcmMXJ31bpbBaNqzCNrng&m= > 3MyT2IBHmmEmtejJI2o73p3zIjhzSmGtffDprR-DdD0&s=TufjwL4DRLGVAWd56qU- > 6DaDDRfPsgeHp8JmN2XrdTE&e= > for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: > https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__ > datatracker.ietf.org_doc_draft-2Dietf-2Dospf-2Dlink- > 2Doverload_&d=DwICaQ&c=HAkYuh63rsuhr6Scbfh0UjBXeMK-ndb3voDTXcWzoCI&r= > NyjLsr7JA7mvpCJa0YmPdVKcmMXJ31bpbBaNqzCNrng&m= > 3MyT2IBHmmEmtejJI2o73p3zIjhzSmGtffDprR-DdD0&s= > avFGB5zEal090OxCbLLU5A1NvjlOJREQPCY-yP7GTDk&e= > > > > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > I think this document would be clearer if the example in S 7.1 were in the > intro. I was scratching my head a bit at the beginning and then got to 7.1 > and it made more sense. > > >
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