Hi Jim, We addressed your feedback and submitted the new version.
Thanks, Tobias > On 1. Dec 2020, at 15:58, Tobias Sattler <satt...@united-domains.de> wrote: > > Hi Jim, > > Thank you for your swift feedback. > > We will go through it and make the adjustments where needed. > > Best, > Tobias > >> On 1. Dec 2020, at 15:35, Gould, James <jgould=40verisign....@dmarc.ietf.org >> <mailto:jgould=40verisign....@dmarc.ietf.org>> wrote: >> >> In reviewing draft-ietf-regext-epp-registry-maintenance-05, below is my >> feedback: >> >> Replace “defnition” with “definition” in two places. >> Section 2.3 Maintenance Elements >> I would modify the description of the <maint:item> element. Specifically, >> change the second sentence to read like “This element is used in a >> maintenance item EPP <info> response and <poll> message.”. >> Section 3.1.3.1 “Query one maintenance item” >> The name “Query one maintenance item” could be shortened to “Info >> Maintenance Item”. >> I would explicitly define the Info Maintenance Item command element >> (<maint:id>) without making the reference to Section 2.3, since Section 2.3 >> defines the Info Maintenance Item Response. >> The command example incorrectly references >> <maint:impact>blackout</maint:impact> instead of >> <maint:impact>full</maint:impact>. >> The dates in the response example should be updated to more recent dates >> (e.g., update 2017 to 2020) >> I would define the response similar to: >> i. When >> an <info> command has been processed successfully, the EPP <resData> element >> MUST contain a child <maint:infData> element that identifies the maintenance >> namespace. The <maint:infData> element contains the <maint:item> element >> defined in Section 2.3. >> Section 3.1.3.2 “Query maintenance list” >> The name could be updated to “Info Maintenance List”. >> I would explicitly define the Info Maintenance List element (<maint:list/>), >> which is an empty element to indicate an Info Maintenance List command. >> The dates in the response example should be updated to more recent dates >> (e.g., update 2017 to 2020) >> I would define the response similar to: >> i. When >> an <info> command has been processed successfully, the EPP <resData> element >> MUST contain a child <maint:infData> element that identifies the maintenance >> namespace. The <maint:infData> element contains the <maint:list> element >> with a list of <maint:listItem> elements. The <maint:listItem> element >> contains the following child elements: >> 1. <maint:id>: <maint:id> defined in Section 2.3. >> 2. <maint:start>: <maint:start> defined in Section 2.3. >> 3. <maint:end>: <maint:end> defined in Section 2.3. >> 4. <maint:crDate>: <maint:crDate> defined in Section 2.3. >> 5. <maint:upDate>: OPTIONAL <maint:upDate> defined in Section 2.3. >> Sect 3.1.4 “EPP <poll> Command” >> The dates in the poll response example should be updated to more recent >> dates (e.g., update 2017 to 2020) >> >> -- >> >> JG >> >> >> >> James Gould >> Fellow Engineer >> jgo...@verisign.com <mailto:jgo...@verisign.com> >> <applewebdata://13890C55-AAE8-4BF3-A6CE-B4BA42740803/jgo...@verisign.com >> <applewebdata://13890C55-AAE8-4BF3-A6CE-B4BA42740803/jgo...@verisign.com>> >> >> 703-948-3271 >> 12061 Bluemont Way >> Reston, VA 20190 >> >> Verisign.com <http://verisign.com/> <http://verisigninc.com/ >> <http://verisigninc.com/>> >> >> On 12/1/20, 7:32 AM, "regext on behalf of internet-dra...@ietf.org >> <mailto:internet-dra...@ietf.org>" <regext-boun...@ietf.org >> <mailto:regext-boun...@ietf.org> on behalf of internet-dra...@ietf.org >> <mailto:internet-dra...@ietf.org>> wrote: >> >> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts >> directories. >> This draft is a work item of the Registration Protocols Extensions WG of >> the IETF. >> >> Title : Registry Maintenance Notifications for the >> Extensible Provisioning Protocol (EPP) >> Authors : Tobias Sattler >> Roger Carney >> Jody Kolker >> Filename : >> draft-ietf-regext-epp-registry-maintenance-05.txt >> Pages : 20 >> Date : 2020-12-01 >> >> Abstract: >> This document describes an Extensible Provision Protocol (EPP) >> mapping for registry's maintenance notifications. >> >> >> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: >> >> 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