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reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
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Document: draft-ietf-sipping-update-pai-09.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2009-05-06
IETF LC End Date: 2009-05-11
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: Ready
Major issues: none
Minor issues:
IMHO the Abstract should be reworded a bit before publication
(RFC Editor could handle this)
Nits/editorial comments:
- Behaviour -> Behavior (i.e., American spelling)
- ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
- 1 page 3: the right place to introduce common abbrevs: UAC, UAS, URI...
- 2 page 3: UAC and URI abbrevs should be introduced
- 2 page 4: same for UAS
- 2 page 4: standardised -> standardized
- 3.1 page 4: same for PSTN (I suggest in "o PSTN gateways;")
- 3.2 page 6: poor wording:
"with methods that are not provided for in RFC 3325 or any other RFC."
- 6 page 10: standardised -> standardized
- 7 page 10 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
Regards
francis.dup...@fdupont.fr
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