I reviewed the doc and had a bunch of editorial suggestions.

Anoop

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Section 2
control layer protocol -> control plane protocol
Segment routing header instantiated -> Segment routing header is instantiated
We call "MPLS Control Plane Client (MCC)" any control plane ->
We use the term "MPLS Control Plane Client (MCC)" to refer to any control plane
which restrict its ability -> which restricts its ability
In order ... -> This paragraph should be a subsection titled Node-SID
TI-LFA -- expand acronym and provide reference (the reference is
provided later, but should be provided here)
node-SID -> Node-SID

Section 2.1
....,etc -> , etc.
Instantiating Segment -> Instantiating segment

Section 2.2
Probably be better if moved to being the first subsection in Section 2.

Section 2.3
MPLS Label ranges -> MPLS label ranges
The list of ranges comprising -> Any pair of ranges from the list of
ranges comprising
A Local segment -> A local segment
except rule -> except the rule
....future study -> ...future study.

Section 2.4
In the title -- label -> Label

Section 2.5
Segment-Routing MPLS -> Segment Routing MPLS
>>>
For the purpose of incoming
label collision resolution, a routing instance is identified by a
single incoming label downloader to FIB.
>>>
....identified by a single entity that installs incoming labels in the LFIB?
(downloader is a new term.)

make numerical value -> make the numerical value
map to the same -> maps to the same
a first-come-first-serve -> first-come-first-serve
still collision -> still a collision
reload -> reboot (only instance of reload, many instances of reboot)

Section 2.5.1
>>>
Each FEC is assigned an administrative distance. The FEC
administrative distance is encoded as an 8-bit value. The lower the
value, the better the administrative distance.
>>>
Move to be first paragraph in 2.5.1

smallest numerical FEC value -> smallest numerical FEC value.
collision freeness on the same router -> collision freeness on the same router.
administrative distance of any other FEC type -> administrative
distance of any other FEC type.
type code point for each SR FEC defined at the beginning of this Section ->
code points for each SR FEC types defined at the beginning of this section
an SR policy [RFC8402]. -> an SR policy [RFC8402]
Missing periods at the end of many bullets/sub-bullets, and at last
sentence of section.
encoded in a 16 bits field -> encoded using 16 bits
routing_instance_id, Topology, SR Algorithm,) -> Routing Instance ID,
Topology, SR Algorithm)
Color_id -> Color ID
allow to map the original index -> allow mapping of the original index

Section 2.5.2.2
with the prefix 192.0.2.1/32 ->  with the prefix 192.0.2.1/32.
index 1 corresponds to the local label 16001 -> index 1 corresponds to
the local label 16001.  (Also remove following bullet.)
adj-SID, Adj-SID -- make consistent

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