> > Hi,
> > 
> > A draft feature spot for the web transition 2009
> is
> > here:
> > 
> >
> http://opensolaris.org/os/project/website/content/home
> 
> > _page_draft32/
> > 
> > Let me know what you think.
> 
> I think you need a better image. Even a fairly
> generic OpenSolaris logo would be better than the
> icon. What about a scaled-down version of this:
> 
> http://blogs.sun.com/pnarayan/resource/opensolaris.jpg
> 
> 
> Or perhaps a screenshot of the new OpenSolaris.org
> website opened in Firefox on OpenSolaris. (Yes, I
> realise that we won't be moving to the new site in
> phase 1).

Also the text suffers from comma splice - I would remove the first comma and 
both commas in the second paragraph as they are unnecessary.

And it might be worth heading it "Transition to New Website Infrastructure" or 
something like that for the uninitiated, since the text doesn't explain what is 
happening much - just that there is a transition taking place. It might also be 
worth adding a sentance like "The whole opensolaris.org web site will be 
gradually moved onto a new platform [based around XWiki to replace the current 
in-house system]." (Section in brackets optional).

Cheers

Andrew.
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