i'd lose the given from the last line.
maybe even the "cannot" could "can" given, that time (as we know it) is a human construct
----- Original Message ----- From: matt lee To: WRYTING-L@LISTSERV.UTORONTO.CA Sent: Thursday, March 09, 2006 1:19 PM Subject: Some givens Given, that writing is essentially a redundant activity; Given, that breathing is miraculously over-rated; Given, that eyesight is lost on the blindly ignorant; Given, that insanity is the greatest of all excuses; Given, that poetry entwines semantics and syntax; Given, that everything said is already dead; Given, that voices that continue ought to enthuse; Given, that masturbation is a fruitless pleasure; Given, that bella donna is the mansons crime; Given, that shivering is a listless intention; Given, that apathy is the disastrous lie; Given, that violence is the only true line; Given, that extremism is the most honoured virtue; Given, that time is above all something that cannot be wasted. *************<"">**************** http://homepage.ntlworld.com/matt.lee7 Blog http://www.livejournal.com/users/chinkoflight/ -- No virus found in this outgoing message. Checked by AVG Free Edition. Version: 7.1.375 / Virus Database: 268.2.1/277 - Release Date: 08/03/2006 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ No virus found in this incoming message. Checked by AVG Free Edition. Version: 7.1.375 / Virus Database: 268.2.1/277 - Release Date: 08/03/2006