Dear Mani, The partial re-write is more than welcome...how can I even presume that I, a silly amatuer poetess, ought to demand forgiveness from you? Your art is infinitely superior to mine, and i can only feel glad that you found my poem worthy of attention. The re-write sounds a lot better to the ears then my own creation...and i sincerely hope that you will continue to guide me in future. Thankyou so much!
And I read your Haikus..."Cherry Blossoms" is so beautiful!...and the three haikus on Motif Magazine were also very nice. Your poem "Jazz" and Jane's poem "Smoke", both are sensually evocative and very good. I found them very appealing to my aesthetics... Thankyou once again, Warmest wishes, Farah. --- In [email protected], M Suri <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > > Note: forwarded message attached. > > > We are unable to deliver the message from <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> > to <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>. > > Your message was sent to a group that does not exist. Please check > to make sure you spelled the group name correctly. > > For further assistance, please visit http://help.yahoo.com/help/us/groups/ > > Dear Farah, > > Life is such as it is-- > a convex mirror to one's fantasy. > It has its mirth and bliss; > just look, see > the butterfly flit fancy free. > > If dreams are desires > and b equals a, > perforce, good friend, laws of life > demand that a equals b > and desires are dreams > squarely rooted in reality. > > And yet! the old question was more than one; > I count four interrogatories > when there are really three. > one suspects syntax is to blame > and poetic licence is rarely free. > > Now, dare I suggest the following partial re-write?: > > An Old Question (or Two or Three) > > Why is life what it is? > Why not what I want it to be, > full of joy, blithe, > blissful and carefree? > > Why are dreams desires > And desires dreams? > > So I trust, dear poet, you'll forgive and indulge my vanity, > > Truly, > > Mani Suri > > Farah <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > AN OLD QUESTION > > Why life is what it is? > Why not what I want it to be? > So full of joy, so blithe, > So blissful and carefree. > > Why dreams are desires? > And desires ; dreams? > > .................... > > Fantasies are clouds, > Hovering above your mind, > Thick and full of promising rain... > Yet when you reach out to grab some, > The winds blow them away, > And you are left standing, > In a burning sun! > > Farah(1999) > > > > > -- > You are encouraged to post poetry, respond critically to the poems circulated and participate in discussions. To post, email your message to [email protected] OR post online at http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/post/ > > Tell friends to subscribe to ZESTPoets by sending a blank email to [EMAIL PROTECTED], OR, if they have a Yahoo! ID, by visiting http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/join/ > > > > ---theZESTcommunity-------------- > > [1] ZESTCurrent: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCurrent/ > [2] ZESTEconomics: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTEconomics/ > [3] ZESTGlobal: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTGlobal/ > [4] ZESTMedia: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTMedia/ > [5] ZESTPoets: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ > [6] ZESTCaste: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCaste/ > [7] ZESTAlternative: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTAlternative/ > [8] TalkZEST: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/TalkZEST/ > --- > > > > --------------------------------- > YAHOO! GROUPS LINKS > > > Visit your group "ZESTPoets" on the web. > > To unsubscribe from this group, send an email to: > [EMAIL PROTECTED] > > Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to the Yahoo! Terms of Service. > > > --------------------------------- ------------------------ Yahoo! Groups Sponsor --------------------~--> <font face=arial size=-1><a href="http://us.ard.yahoo.com/SIG=12hgeqdmi/M=362335.6886444.7839734.2575449/D=groups/S=1705020082:TM/Y=YAHOO/EXP=1124621431/A=2894362/R=0/SIG=138c78jl6/*http://www.networkforgood.org/topics/arts_culture/?source=YAHOO&cmpgn=GRP&RTP=http://groups.yahoo.com/";>What would our lives be like without music, dance, and theater?Donate or volunteer in the arts today at Network for Good</a>.</font> --------------------------------------------------------------------~-> -- You are encouraged to post poetry, respond critically to the poems circulated and participate in discussions. To post, email your message to [email protected] OR post online at http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/post/ Tell friends to subscribe to ZESTPoets by sending a blank email to [EMAIL PROTECTED], OR, if they have a Yahoo! ID, by visiting http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/join/ ---theZESTcommunity-------------- [1] ZESTCurrent: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCurrent/ [2] ZESTEconomics: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTEconomics/ [3] ZESTGlobal: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTGlobal/ [4] ZESTMedia: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTMedia/ [5] ZESTPoets: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ [6] ZESTCaste: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCaste/ [7] ZESTAlternative: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTAlternative/ [8] TalkZEST: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/TalkZEST/ --- Yahoo! Groups Links <*> To visit your group on the web, go to: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ <*> To unsubscribe from this group, send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] <*> Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to: http://docs.yahoo.com/info/terms/
