Hi Ted,

Thanks for your reply. We will wait to hear from you before continuing with the 
publication process.

Sincerely,
RFC Editor/st

> On Apr 28, 2025, at 3:10 PM, Ted Lemon <[email protected]> wrote:
> 
> You asked for a last review, which seems reasonable, but I am on vacation 
> this week, so that won't happen until next week.
> 
>> On 28 Apr 2025, at 16:08, Sarah Tarrant <[email protected]> 
>> wrote:
>> 
>> Hi Ted and Stuart,
>> 
>> This is a friendly reminder that we have yet to hear back from you regarding 
>> this document’s readiness for publication.  
>> 
>> Please review the AUTH48 status page 
>> (http://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9665) for further information and the 
>> previous messages in this thread for pertinent communication.
>> 
>> Thank you,
>> RFC Editor/st
>> 
>>> On Apr 22, 2025, at 9:24 AM, Sarah Tarrant <[email protected]> 
>>> wrote:
>>> 
>>> Hi Ted,
>>> 
>>> Thank you for your reply. We have updated the document accordingly.
>>> 
>>> Please review the document carefully to ensure satisfaction as we do not 
>>> make changes once it has been published as an RFC. Contact us with any 
>>> further updates or with your approval of the document in its current form.  
>>> We will await approvals from each author prior to moving forward in the 
>>> publication process.
>>> 
>>> The updated files have been posted here (please refresh):
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>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9665.xml
>>> 
>>> The relevant diff files have been posted here (please refresh):
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>>> 
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>>> 
>>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see:
>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9665
>>> 
>>> Thank you,
>>> RFC Editor/st
>>> 
>>>> On Apr 18, 2025, at 4:31 PM, Ted Lemon <[email protected]> wrote:
>>>> 
>>>> On 17 Apr 2025, at 14:26, Sarah Tarrant <[email protected]> 
>>>> wrote:
>>>>> Stuart and Ted - We have a few followup questions/comments:
>>>>> 
>>>>> A) Regarding:
>>>>>> XML comment from Ted:
>>>>>> Adding a dependent clause here obscures the meaning of the second half 
>>>>>> of the compound sentence.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Current:
>>>>> DNS-SD [RFC6763] also allows clients to discover services using the
>>>>> DNS protocol over traditional unicast [RFC1035]. 
>>>>> 
>>>>> Would the following make the dependent clause relationship more clear? If 
>>>>> not, feel free to provide your preferred text.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Perhaps:
>>>>> DNS-SD [RFC6763] also allows clients to discover services by using the
>>>>> DNS protocol over traditional unicast [RFC1035].
>>>> 
>>>> Yes, this is a good clarification.
>>>> 
>>>>> B) Regarding:
>>>>>> XML comment from Ted:
>>>>>> I don't think e.g. should have a comma after it. I changed it to "for 
>>>>>> example" to illustrate why I think this, but my Latin is rusty, so maybe 
>>>>>> it does make sense when the abbreviation is used? Ah, I see why I'm 
>>>>>> confused. In most of the cases where e.g. or for example is being used, 
>>>>>> it's being used like this: If we use foo, for example, then BAR. But 
>>>>>> here debugging isn't the example, so the extra comma changes the meaning.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Ted's text:
>>>>> This is optional because
>>>>> the reverse mapping PTR record serves no essential protocol function,
>>>>> but it may be useful for debugging, for example in annotating network
>>>>> packet traces or logs. 
>>>>> 
>>>>> We understand that commas may seem to break up thoughts, but thankfully 
>>>>> this is not the case for "e.g.", "i.e.", or "for example". It is 
>>>>> house-style for there to be a comma before and after these elements, so 
>>>>> it does not break the sentence. We have examples of this in the style 
>>>>> guide (https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc7322) as well as the Web 
>>>>> Portion of the Style Guide 
>>>>> (https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/). Please let us know if you 
>>>>> would like to revert back to "e.g.".
>>>>> 
>>>>> Current:
>>>>> This is optional because
>>>>> the reverse mapping PTR record serves no essential protocol function,
>>>>> but it may be useful for debugging, for example, in annotating network
>>>>> packet traces or logs.
>>>> 
>>>> I really don't love this sentence either way. We're trying to say too 
>>>> much. How about:
>>>> 
>>>> This is optional: the reverse mapping PTR record serves no essential 
>>>> protocol function. One reason to provide reverse mappings is that they can 
>>>> be used to annotate logs and network packet traces.
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> C) Regarding:
>>>>>>> 15) <!-- [rfced] We had some questions regarding capitalization of 
>>>>>>> certain terms:
>>>>>>> 
>>>>>>> b) We see the following similar terms.  Please review and let us know
>>>>>>> if/how to make these terms consistent.
>>>>>>> 
>>>>>>> service instance name 
>>>>>>> Service Instance Name
>>>>>>> "Service Instance Name"
>>>>>> [Ted] The above are all the same thing
>>>>> 
>>>>> May we update to "service instance" for all, then?
>>>> 
>>>> No. Where you see "service instance" and not "service instance name" we 
>>>> are talking about the thing the name refers to: these are two separate 
>>>> things. It's fine to use all lowercase though, if that's what you were 
>>>> asking.
>>>> 
>>>>> D) Regarding:
>>>>>> f) Regarding the terms "Service Description", Service Discovery, and
>>>>>> "Host Description".
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> - We see both Instruction and instruction when following these terms.
>>>>>> If/How may we make this uniform?
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> - Should “instruction” or the like should be inserted after instances
>>>>>> of these terms?  Sometimes they are followed by "record" or "update",
>>>>>> if they appear without a label, might this be confusing to the reader?
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> Example:
>>>>>> The KEY record in Service Description updates MAY be omitted for
>>>>>> brevity; if it is omitted, the SRP registrar MUST behave as if the
>>>>>> same KEY record that is given for the Host Description is also given
>>>>>> for each Service Description for which no KEY record is provided.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Please let us know if we need to make any changes regarding this 
>>>>> question. It appears that this may no have been addressed.
>>>> 
>>>> The service description is the data structure. The service description 
>>>> instruction is the collection of updates that, when applied together, 
>>>> creates the intended service description. A service description update is 
>>>> an individual update in a service description instruction. Please do not 
>>>> make any changes to the way we have written this.
>>>> 
>>>>> E) Regarding the IANA section:
>>>>> 
>>>>> The text refers to IESG Approval but also points to RFC 8126 to define 
>>>>> "specification exists".  Do we need to reference 8126 again here because 
>>>>> it's quoted text?  
>>>>> 
>>>>> The following appears in Section 10.3: 
>>>>> The IETF has change control for this
>>>>> registry. New entries may be added either as a result of Standards
>>>>> Action or with IESG Approval, provided that a specification exists
>>>>> [RFC8126].
>>>>> 
>>>>> It is unclear whether "specification exists [RFC8126]" means: 
>>>>> 
>>>>> a) a combination of IESG Approval and Specification Required 
>>>>> 
>>>>> b) IESG Approval, provided that a document exists
>>>>> 
>>>>> Does the text refer to the definition of "Specification Required" to 
>>>>> indicate what satisfies "specification", as opposed to defining the 
>>>>> Specification Required policy overall (which also requires expert review)?
>>>> 
>>>> The intention is that an entry in the registry can be created either 
>>>> through standards action (that is, a standards-track RFC being published). 
>>>> Or, a document exists and the IESG approves adding the entry (e.g. an ISE 
>>>> document , an informational IETF document, or an external SDO's document). 
>>>> I realize that Standards Action subsumes "document exists + IESG approval" 
>>>> and so this is a bit confusing. What we specifically mean here is 
>>>> "Specification Required AND IESG approval" as described in sections 4.6 
>>>> and 4.10 of RFC8126.
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> If this is the case, may we use the relevant text from RFC 8126.  For 
>>>>> example: 
>>>>> 
>>>>> New entries may be added either as a result of
>>>>> Standards Action (Section 4.9 of [RFC8126]) or with IESG Approval
>>>>> (Section 4.10 of [RFC8126]), provided that the values and 
>>>>> their meanings are documented in a permanent and readily
>>>>> available public specification, in sufficient detail so that
>>>>> interoperability between independent implementations is possible.
>>>> 
>>>> This text accurately conveys our intention, so it's fine to use it.
>>>> 
>>>> Thanks for your continued patience and effort on this. Hopefully we are 
>>>> nearly there. :)
>>>> 
>>> 
>> 
> 

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