Hi Pete, Trimming it down even more.
> On Jun 20, 2018, at 5:18 AM, Pete Resnick <presn...@qti.qualcomm.com> wrote: > > Hi Mahesh, > > Trimming a bit: > > On 20 Jun 2018, at 0:36, Mahesh Jethanandani wrote: > > >>> 3.1 - s/The test session name that MUST be identical/The test session name, >>> which MUST be identical (Unless you mean something really weird that I don't >>> think you mean. If you don't see the difference, then trust me, you mean >>> "which", not "that”.) >> >> You mean in Section 3.3. > > Yes, sorry about that. Section 3.1 has a similar problem: > > s/The test session name that uniquely identifies/The test session name, which > uniquely identifies > > and I forgot to note that one. > >> How about s/The test session name that MUST be identical with the/The test >> session name MUST be identical to the/? > > That's not quite right. You are giving a list of fields (as you say, "Primary > configuration fields include:"), so you don't want something in that list > that is a rule. The field is "the test session name", and that field MUST be > identical to the client name. What we are trying to say is that “the test session name” on the Session-Sender side must correspond to “the test session name” on the Control-Client side (not the client's name). > > When you say, "the test session name that MUST be identical with...", it > sounds like there is more than one test session name, That is not what we are trying to say. Each test session has only one name. And that is why I reworded it say “the test session name MUST be identical to the”, hopefully implying that there is only one name. > and you're talking about the one that MUST be identical with the client name. What we are trying to say is that every test session in the Session-Sender has a corresponding test session on the Control-Client. The name of the test session on the Session-Sender side has to match the name of the test session on the Control-Client. > Similarly with the above, it sounds like there's one test session name which > uniquely identifies it, and one that doesn't uniquely identify it. That's not > what you mean. As I say above, the test sessions on either side have only one name. Having said all that, if you feel that your suggested edit is better, we can go with that. I just feel my suggested edit is crisper. Thanks. Mahesh Jethanandani mjethanand...@gmail.com _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
