Reviewer: Russ Housley Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-ippm-rfc8889bis-02 Reviewer: Russ Housley Review Date: 2022-06-29 IETF LC End Date: 2022-06-21 IESG Telechat date: 2022-07-14 Summary: Ready with Nits Major Concerns: None Minor Concerns: Section 8 says: "... can be incorporated into A, ..." I think that "A" is described in Figure 5, but it took me a few minutes to figure that out. Please clarify. Section 9 says: Either one or two flag bits might be available for marking in different deployments: This is followed by three labeled paragraphs. Can this sentence be expanded to cover all three of the paragraphs that follow? Nits: Section 5.1: s/split our monitoring/split the monitoring/ Section 5.1: s/In our monitoring network/In the monitoring network/ Section 5.1 says: The algorithm described above network is an iterative clustering algorithm, but it is also possible to apply a recursive clustering algorithm by using the node-node adjacency matrix representation [IEEE-ACM-ToN-MPNPM]. I cannot understand is sentence. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
