Russ, thank you for your review. I have entered a Discuss ballot for this document based on my own review.
Lars > On 2022-6-29, at 7:03, Russ Housley via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> wrote: > > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-ippm-rfc8889bis-02 > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review Date: 2022-06-29 > IETF LC End Date: 2022-06-21 > IESG Telechat date: 2022-07-14 > > > Summary: Ready with Nits > > > Major Concerns: None > > > Minor Concerns: > > Section 8 says: "... can be incorporated into A, ..." > I think that "A" is described in Figure 5, but it took me > a few minutes to figure that out. Please clarify. > > > Section 9 says: > > Either one or two flag bits might be available for marking in > different deployments: > > This is followed by three labeled paragraphs. Can this sentence > be expanded to cover all three of the paragraphs that follow? > > > Nits: > > Section 5.1: s/split our monitoring/split the monitoring/ > > Section 5.1: s/In our monitoring network/In the monitoring network/ > > Section 5.1 says: > > The algorithm described above network is an iterative clustering > algorithm, but it is also possible to apply a recursive clustering > algorithm by using the node-node adjacency matrix representation > [IEEE-ACM-ToN-MPNPM]. > > I cannot understand is sentence. > > > > > -- > last-call mailing list > last-c...@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
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