On Wednesday, July 25, 2012 4:11:41 PM UTC-7, Axel Hecht wrote: > Hi Winston, > > two comments: > > > Unless you opt-in to ongoing SMS messaging, the mobile phone number > > you input on the website will be used and stored only for the purpose > > of sending this one-time message and to provide abuse blocking, where > > available. > > If I negate that sentence, I get: > > If you opt-in to ongoing SMS messaging, we can do whatever. > > Also, you're making the grammar of that sentence harder to understand > than necessary. I think the policy should be simple English as much as > possible, given that many non-native speakers will read it. > > "If you opt-out to ongoing SMS messaging, ...." says the same > thing. > Though it's more obvious that you're not really qualifying what one > would opt-in to. Which is my first comment. > > Axel
Hi Axel - Thank you for the feedback on the wording! Would this be an improvement? "The mobile phone number you provide will be used and stored only for the purpose of sending requested communications and providing abuse blocking, where available." _______________________________________________ governance mailing list [email protected] https://lists.mozilla.org/listinfo/governance
